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What do you want from me??????
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What do you want from me?????? |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI 
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What do you want from me?? What is it you wont leave me alone about?? Why cant you be like everyone else?? Leave me hanging out to dry Why wont u go away?? Your love is the thing that faded away. Why do you think I want it back?? Because im sad,lonely,nothing to do. Taking advantage of a broken heart, Who does that? Someone who doesnt have a heart, Why cant you leave me alone? Please leave me alone, I want to cry, Cry by myself, Drown all my sorrows thinking of you, You ask me not to play like this, Who's playing? Not me so hey LEAVE ME BE! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... very... ventish poetry. I am not sure I care for it all that much as a poem, but I see how important it is to write. Hope all gets better for you man... ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
That's what poems are, Allan, a rush of emotions and perception.  Good poem...I hate it when they just keep hanging around. Makes you want to scream. I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :) |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was pretty good... not as good as some of the others I've seen from you. But nice job, just the same. Keep posting. I hope things get better for you  --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
When I read this I kept thinking that it sounds so sarcastic. Like you want her back so bad that you wrote a poem about how she won't go away. Kinda an opposite view on things. I'm pretty sure that's not what you meant, you would have said if it wasn't your real emotions. I hope you get some time to yourself to think things through in this situation. Good job on the poem Branden, keep sharing  "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. Ever tried the Teen Explorer Forum? [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 04-15-2001).] |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
ya know what..ive only read one other poem by you, but it seems that you write straight from the heart...like me! and even if ppl critize the way you write on here (like the rythem and stuff) it doesnt matter, b.c your expressing your feelings!!! (and i know how ya feel..been there!!) <3 kim " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Way to let it all loose, Brand man! Better days are on the way. ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This one was OK, but not your best at all. I hope you are doing OK. I hope that this isn't really happening and you just felt like writing about it. I know you do that sometimes Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I would have said what everyone else said in my own words so all I have is...Hope things get better and until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yep....that was a venter. Hope all is well!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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