Prelude- Leaves (new series)

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LoveBug

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0 posted 2001-04-13 02:10 PM

(My shortest poem ever! Take a picture!)

A mighty tree stands tall
Among many others in a wood
But Time goes by
And the leaves must fall

Each
       leaf
             has
                  its
                        story

As it falls to the muddy earth below

I grab a few
So few!
Before they rot in the earth

Tell me your story, leaves
So that I may grow, also…

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Dopey Dope

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1 posted 2001-04-13 02:26 PM

Awwwww this is beautiful Erica!
I loved this and yes this was short!
w0hoo!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

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2 posted 2001-04-13 04:23 PM

*takes a picture* Loved it Lovely Lovey Buggy!

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There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

Allan Riverwood

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3 posted 2001-04-13 04:28 PM

You already know how magnificent this is to me, Erica... I really REALLY love this, it's an excellent prelude to your series. However, wouldn't it be a good idea to include the actual name of the series in your title?

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
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LoveBug

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4 posted 2001-04-13 05:16 PM

My title is leaves, Allan, but I guess I'd better explain it now. This series is going to outline big events in human history. You might be asking what the heck this has to do with leaves... well, that's for me to know and you to find out!

Thanks for the replies, all!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Acies

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5 posted 2001-04-13 06:49 PM

Wonderful post Erica
One thing though, i believe if you swap also and grow in the end, it'll help the poem flow better.
thanks for sharing

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Poet deVine

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6 posted 2001-04-13 10:55 PM

Ah..interesting take on this...I await your next poem..

Attack Ferrit
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7 posted 2001-04-13 11:53 PM

really great post. i can't wait to read the rest.

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anonymous albert ?

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8 posted 2001-04-14 12:37 PM

nicely done. i liked it. keep writin

Fading Away

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9 posted 2001-04-14 01:00 PM

Beautiful poem, Erica. It is short, but it's very well written for it's length. Nice job!

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subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

banburycross
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10 posted 2001-04-15 12:00 PM

This is beautiful, i love the format. the prelude has me eagerly awaiting the rest of the series, keep posting your work.

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