Why,Why,Why (plz read its the one in a million great poems ive wrote)

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branden726

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since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

0 posted 2001-04-13 12:30 PM

WHY

Why do I let jealousy get in the way.
Why does it seem like its me pulling us apart.
Why does nothing seem to be right to me.
Why has my love for you seemed to fade.
Why cant you re-light my flame.
Why is everything in my head turning around.
Why cant I pick the right way to go.
Why am I taking this so hard.
Why is it I love you but at the same time i wanna leave you.
Why cant I get my mind straight.
Why cant I seem to do anything without mistakes.
Can you just give me a few days?
To get my feelings straight.
To see if my love for you is still there.
Well sorry im in doubt.
Its the fights,the screaming,the yelling.
I cant take it.
Let me live.
Let me like.
Let me be there forever.
Let me take my life in my hands.
Im sorry but you controll the whole thing.
What I do, When I do it, You always have to know.
Sorry this is the end.
End of the relationship.....Not yet
End of the poem.....Yes
Let me think it over for a few days without your calls without seeing you and well this will be a great day.

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-04-13 12:43 PM

Brandon, I liked it. It was a good poem, I just hope everything is going OK though. Take it easy
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2001-04-13 12:51 PM

I hope everything is alright, and i understand needing to take a step back and examine things. sometimes it's what you really have to do. now as far as it being one of the millions of great poems you've wrote (or written, what ever you're in the mood for) i don't know that i can comment on that one...

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-13 02:07 PM

I hope things are ok with you. Get better man....good poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-04-13 02:57 PM

Great poem. It sounds kinda confusing, but poetry is just ryming thoughts, so they dont have to make sense huh?

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

5 posted 2001-04-13 04:07 PM

Hey man....this was a very good poem, I really liked it, and I sure do hope things get peachy for you soon...Put a smiley on dat face o' yours!

~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

branden726

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since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

6 posted 2001-04-14 08:55 AM

Hey all...Well i dont know if i want everything peachy :/ i dont know and yeah i meant this is one of my greatest poems showing my feeling o ya hey poems are not about Rhyme and if thats why your writing you've got it all wrong....Poetry is about... Love,Hate,Jealousy,Forgivness, and everything else so what im trying to say is poetry is about YOU your feelings man dont write cuz it sounds good write whats inside you

im outtie guys.....bye

"i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw"

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-04-14 12:58 PM

This is a pretty good poem. I didn't think it was as good as some others I've read from you. Good luck on the situation.. I hope everything works out for the better.
Nice job.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2001-04-14 09:10 PM

I think this one really expressed it all well, good job on the poem Branden.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.
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lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

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east haddam (moodus) ct :)

9 posted 2001-04-15 09:20 PM

hey once again i wanna say this was straight from the heart and it looks like me and you have the same veiw on poetry!!! keep up the awsome work!!
*KiM*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

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