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keoni
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0 posted 2001-04-12 03:19 PM


OK, I wrote this in about 20 min. It isn't very good. But something very painful happened last night with someone I really care about.This may be in bad form or look like jumbled words, but please take the time to read and respond cause I really, really need it.Thanx

I lost a good friend today
How it happened I cannot say
But she was a best friend in almost every way
People change over time, probably less her and more me
Don’t know how to get back to the way we were, so I guess I’ll let it be
Hope fate will play a part, but only in time we’ll see
Painful words were spoken
Certain hearts were broken
But there’s still a chance, together we left that door open
I couldn’t close it cause there’s still love in my heart
It’s not just something I can tuck away, cause it’s been there from the start
That’s what makes it so much harder for me to see us part
There were deceptions and there were lies
Did not know who I was looking at when I looked into her eyes
It wasn’t her, just her changes that I came to despise
She tells me I’ve lost all respect
All things considered, what else did she expect
But knowing me I was too harsh and way too damn direct
I know at times I am a total jerk
I have pissed and moaned and complained about her every little quirk
But this time I don’t know if we can ever make things work
I tried my hardest and put her on a throne
In return she up and left and left me all alone
And yet she wonders why my heart has gone and turned to stone
14 months I’ve known you
For 8 of those I’ve been blue
And for the rest of my life I will wonder if you could ever stay true
I’ve dealt with your commands
And met all your demands
But this time I don’t know what to do, so I’ll lay it in God’s hands

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

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chas
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1 posted 2001-04-12 04:03 PM


i wanted to cry, but being a guy, i stoped myself, wish i knew what happed, wish i could help. maybe i can't, but hopefully maybe some else.
keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
2 posted 2001-04-12 04:08 PM


Thanx man, I wanted to cry too, but that doesn't do anything butmake you feel worse.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Child of the Stars
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3 posted 2001-04-12 05:24 PM


  *sigh* so many things, so many things to deal with......*hugs* that's all I know how to do.
  ~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

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4 posted 2001-04-12 06:03 PM


*sigh* dude I hope things get better for you man. We all deserve the best, and you do too. Messed up man.....Hope things get well.
Good luck

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-04-12 07:43 PM


I know how much it sucks to lose a friend. Everything happens for a reason. Learn from this. I hope all will be well.

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



silvrduck
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6 posted 2001-04-12 09:56 PM


this is a really good poem.. so sad though. i hope it helped some for you to write this.. and I hope everything works out for you.
*hugs* take care

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
7 posted 2001-04-13 12:27 PM


Thanks you guys. I needed this.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

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