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banburycross
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viginia

0 posted 2001-04-12 01:00 PM



I think sometimes upon my youth,
and wonder why it had to go.
Why you took my summer's warmth,
replaced it all with ice and snow.

You told me now is not the time,
for silly games that make no sense.
You took away my basic awe.
You stole my round faced innocence.

You poisoned all my time for laughing,
ate away my simple joys.
You left me with my shattered dreams,
and far too many broken toys.

Were love and light once reigned supreme,
is now where darkness claims a place.
It pulls itself along the tracks,
of tears that still run down my face.

I cannot see my youth today,
my head, it aches, with grown-up cares.
You took away my simple love.
You crucified my teddy bears.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

© Copyright 2001 Peter - All Rights Reserved
Linc
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The Backstreet Boy
1 posted 2001-04-12 01:01 PM


Hey,

    This is a superb poem, I don't know what happened to you but I like it, your first 3 poems where good. But your most recent 2 are excellent. I truly enjoy reading your work. Keep up the great work. This is for my library. Until your next masterpiece

    -- Linc

[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 04-12-2001).]

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The Backstreet Boy
2 posted 2001-04-12 01:05 PM


Hey,

    This is a superb poem, I don't know what happened to you but I like it, your first 3 poems where good. But your most recent 2 are excellent. I truly enjoy reading your work. Keep up the great work. This is for my library. Until your next masterpiece

    -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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3 posted 2001-04-12 05:30 PM


Great job on the poem. I enjoyed this very much!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2001-04-12 07:42 PM


i agree this is a awesome poem.   nice work

*S* staci

AsBurYAnGel
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5 posted 2001-04-12 10:31 PM


hey,
Great poem. Kinda sad but very good. I love your work. Keep writing.

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Twilight Zone
6 posted 2001-04-12 10:57 PM


I'm reading a lot of beautiful poems tonight
Yes, this is one of em
Awesome job on this banburycross
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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7 posted 2001-04-13 10:40 AM


I love the ending to this poem.  This is such a well written poem, and one to be very proud of.  Your talent amazes me.. I love reading your work.
Very nicely done here.. You did another fantastic job, love.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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Allan Riverwood
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8 posted 2001-04-13 10:52 AM


Very good job, Ban!  I really profoundly enjoyed this one, the tetrameter is excellent!  
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a fault!

lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
9 posted 2001-04-15 10:22 PM


ahh..the golden years...wait im still there..but cute poem!!!  i wish i was a lil kid again too..thatd be great..no worries!!!
   <3  *KiM*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

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