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shadydaze
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0 posted 2001-04-12 12:52 PM


Like the stars a-glimmer
in the midnight skies,
are the twinkles a-shimmer
in the depths of your eyes.

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Linc
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1 posted 2001-04-12 12:54 PM


Hey,

    This is a great poem, short and sweet. Keep it up
   -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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banburycross
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viginia
2 posted 2001-04-12 01:02 PM


I really like this.  in very few words you wrote a really powerful poem.  keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-04-12 05:25 PM


Well done! I liked this a lot! Short and good

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-04-13 10:40 AM


This was pretty sweet!  Shorts like this belong at Hallmark.  
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a fault!

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5 posted 2001-04-13 10:44 AM


Heh, Allan.. this is a very Hallmark-y poem.
Nice job, very sweet  

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

lonely*soul
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6 posted 2001-04-15 10:32 PM


hehe you guys are right..it would make a perfect card!!! hehe..but very cute..and quite simple!!
          *KIM*

" im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone"

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7 posted 2001-04-16 02:32 AM


i liked that one a lot...it was really cute especially with the "a-gliimmer" and "a-shimmer"..did i get em right?
cute!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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8 posted 2001-04-16 10:03 AM


Short and sweet, very cool.
Keep on posting.
Andrew

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