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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-04-12 08:28 AM


I thought I had my life back,
to where I wanted it to be.
The world revolved around everyone,
instead of a time warp around me.

I had Justin back beside me,
but not loving me like he did,
I had this thing that made me happy,
something that compelled me to live.

I had the best friends in the world,
who were always there for me,
atleast I thought they were there,
and I thought they always would be.

Well, they got me into trouble,
and got 58 pictures taken away,
and this whole fight never would've happened,
if they would've gotten them back yesterday.

They say I owe them an explanation,
but I don't know what they want me to explain,
they lied to me and they yelled to much,
and it put my heart in pain.

And now I see that 2 of my friends,
weren't really friends at all,
I thought they would always pick me up,
but then they let me fall.

But I've got all of you all here,
and you all are my friends too,
and in closing this I want to say,
I love each and every one of you.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

© Copyright 2001 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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1 posted 2001-04-12 10:38 AM


Nice poem Alyssa. I hope things go better with your friends. Try to work something out with them though, friends are one of the most important things in the world, in my opinion.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

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viginia
2 posted 2001-04-12 12:23 PM


I really hope the situation gets better, i know exactly how you feel in this one.  *hugs all around*

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Linc
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3 posted 2001-04-12 12:58 PM


Hey,

   I also hope things get better for you and your friends   this is a great poem never the less even of the topic isn't great   until your next poem

  -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Allysa
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4 posted 2001-04-12 03:35 PM


Thanks Linc, you're awesome. ANways, things are working out!!!!!!!!! Slowly, but shurly!!!!!!!!!! Anyways, a wise person once said "it takes a strong person to admit they're wrong, but an even stronger one to say I'm sorry."  And I did it!!!!!!! I didnt have faith in myself, but I did it!!!!!!!!!

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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5 posted 2001-04-12 05:50 PM


Nicely done Allysa! Nice to know that things are going great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-04-12 10:54 PM


"But I've got all of you all here,
and you all are my friends too,
and in closing this I want to say,
I love each and every one of you"

I guess this is how we all look at pip
We love you too Allysa  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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7 posted 2001-04-13 11:06 AM


*Hugs*
I'm sorry that the situation sucks right now.. but that quote you said is so true.
Very nice poem, it's well written.  I hope things get better...

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Allan Riverwood
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8 posted 2001-04-13 11:21 AM


Good job, Allysa!  I did like this poem, the scheme and format were just simple enough to let the message shine through.  
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a fault!

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
9 posted 2001-04-13 12:31 PM



Nice poem

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.  
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