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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
The words fall to the bottom of my soul Darkening my heart They carry so much pain Especially coming from you Even though you only said it a few times It seems like a thousand times over and over again They echo in my mind many times Day and night Causing more scars each time heard “I wish you were dead” Even though those words hold so much pain I have to say I most definitely agree I’m just another problem One that no one wishes to fix And I really don’t want to be here with you So yes, I say again, I agree I wish I were dead too never knock on deaths door and run......he hates that!! |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Woah. There is a lot of hate in this poem towards yourself. Email me if you want to talk. Oh, and about your little Critique message, mine couldnt afford real therapy either, but this is a great place to get it! *~*Amanda*~* |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Wow great poem, powerfull  until your next poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was quite powerful. I enjoyed what it had to say....very well done. I do hope things get better for you cuz it sounds like you're going through trying times. Hope all gets well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Wow..excellent poem. Hope everything gets better for you soon. You have prolly heard this before but its something that I have to remind myself of every now and then. You can only take life one day at a time. If today sucks there will always be tomorrow... Lots of love to you ~Nikki~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this poem is good because it's emotions are so direct. If you need help, I encourage you to get it. The poem was written well, keep posting for us! "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was a very good poem. There's a whole lot of strong emotions. Emotions that don't seem to be very good ones.. I really hope things get better.  Nice work. I enjoyed this. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This had a really morbid last line, it left a bad taste in my mouth... Good job... ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I could have written this one myself. Once someone told me that I should be shot in the head, and that hurt alot, even more so cuz I agreed with them. I feel the pain and hate within this piece, and it makes me sad. If you ever want to talk please feel free to IM me on AIM nikkigrl2004 or E-mail me at CrzySmoothie@aol.com I liked this poem though, you did a good job. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
powerful...i can totally relate 2 this one but its not some1 else thats tellin me that but myself that is tellin me.. it hurts and its painful but if u stay in there it'll all get better...as for the poem great discribed emotions hard ones 2 overcome.. thanks for sharing and hope things work out for u and keep writing  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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