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Spine Grinder
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0 posted 2001-04-11 06:44 PM



All in Vain?
Both were beautiful, young, and restless.
Ready for anything, the world could bring.
For the sight of each other, made them breathless.
But little did they know, the bells of sorrow were soon to ring.

With them, they brought, Jackson, Ty, and even little Cole.
All very little, cute, and sweet.
But the bells, when they came, the children is what they stole.
Then the two, came to help, they put up a very good feat.

Their fought was all in vain.
But the bells did spare them,
almost all their pain.
All but one,the branch of love still had a stem.

This poem was written by me to one of my best friends and her boyfriend

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2001-04-11 07:31 PM


this was great.

regina


a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

[This message has been edited by Ina (edited 04-11-2001).]

Fading Away
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2 posted 2001-04-11 08:53 PM


Very nice job, Spine.  From what I've read today, I really like your work, and I look forward to reading more.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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3 posted 2001-04-11 10:29 PM


Cute.  I'm sure they loved it.  
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a fault!

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4 posted 2001-04-12 04:19 AM


Nicely done. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc
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5 posted 2001-04-12 02:06 PM


hey,

Great job

   -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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