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dreamy_eyes
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0 posted 2001-04-11 05:11 PM


IF ONLY!

Everything I have done I regret,
I put it all behind me try and forget,
I think I could have found a way,
If only I didn't see him everyday.

Everything I see is so sad,
or full of violence, red and mad,
I would change this if I could,
If only my life was full of good.

Everyone I touch I push away,
usually because of the things I say,
it's so hard to trust and love again,
If only someone would get rid of men.

Luv Debi xXx  

© Copyright 2001 Debi - All Rights Reserved
lonely*soul
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1 posted 2001-04-11 05:59 PM


hehe i love it!! very cute, didnt really think that the last line was comming but way to turn a more serious poem into a light one!! good job
    <3 *KiM*

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2 posted 2001-04-11 09:15 PM


But...but...*pouts*...but then *I* wouldn't be around...

Great job in venting. I enjoyed this poem even though I am a man.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-04-11 10:33 PM


I hope this was just a vent.  The world needs men!  
I did enjoy the poem though.... hope to see you around here more often.
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a fault!

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4 posted 2001-04-12 02:38 AM


no men????????????????
then no women also...wait what am i saying men need women so..yea that shouldn't happen but no men?

dreamy_eyes
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5 posted 2001-04-12 04:05 AM


Thank you for all your replies! I dont mean no men, as not all of them are bad, Just some of them.

Luv Debi xXx  

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6 posted 2001-04-12 11:11 AM


I haven't seen you posting here before, so i hope i have the chance to read more of your work in the future.  i enjoyed this one (despite the fact that i am a man.  keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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The Backstreet Boy
7 posted 2001-04-12 01:55 PM


Hey,

  Great job  

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8 posted 2001-04-13 11:33 AM


haha!
No men.. the reaction to that one was entertaining!
This is a nice poem.  I haven't read much from you, but I hope to read more soon.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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9 posted 2001-04-13 03:04 PM


This is an amusing ending.  I needed a good laugh too.  Thanks for the read.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

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10 posted 2001-04-13 06:35 PM


I feel ya!!! Sometimes, they need to just be banished... if only we didn't like 'em so darn much.

Jenn

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

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11 posted 2001-04-14 01:08 AM


Not all are bad you know....
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

Ina
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12 posted 2001-04-14 11:08 AM


well i think we need men....lol
there some garbage ones out there. but theres the good ones too. awesome poem
Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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13 posted 2001-04-14 11:18 AM


  Yep, men gotta stay. Nice poem.
  ~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

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14 posted 2001-04-14 02:21 PM


hmm i think we only need about 50% of men, the better half atleast. My life would be so much easier if the other half would just disapear   Graet poem though, keep it up

*dq

-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

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