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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2001-04-11 11:50 AM


Dark blue skies
looked like they could
crack open wide
and release a storm
Not that it'd matter to me
I'm a tickled girl
It's my fantasy

Secret language
of erotic sides
So they don't know
that I'm telling you,
"Let's go to the back room"
I'm a criminal, baby
You made me that way

Bet you think it's weird
I always like to play pretend
All and all
we never go back
Not after the first touch
Never after the last

I remember last night you said
that you thought
you were in over your head
Don't let me scare you

I'm just a little girl




I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too.  

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 04-11-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-04-11 12:44 PM


Ooh sweet!     I really liked this one... dark and seductive.  It made me itch with delight.  
Very well done.  I enjoyed this immensely.  
~Allan

Concieted??  Impossible!  That would be a <i>fault!</i>

Ina
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2 posted 2001-04-11 01:47 PM


whoa!thats was too kewl! awesome! that was amazing like Allan said "dark and seductive"

regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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3 posted 2001-04-11 03:09 PM


This is very dark... I love the ending!  Wonderful job.  Thanks for sharing!

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul."  --Emily Dickinson

Attack Ferrit
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4 posted 2001-04-11 05:47 PM


wow! that was great. i really like the lines
"Don't let me scare you
I'm just a little girl"
really great.



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5 posted 2001-04-12 03:42 AM


JUST a little girl? HA!
Nicely done though. I liked this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

keoni
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6 posted 2001-04-12 10:49 AM


I really liked this one also. Really good piece.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

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7 posted 2001-04-12 02:03 PM


Hey,

      I am speechless it was superb…thats all I can say is superb oh and its going into my library. Until your next masterpiece

   -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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8 posted 2001-04-12 02:04 PM


Hey,

      I am speechless it was superb…thats all I can say is superb oh and its going into my library. Until your next masterpiece

   -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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9 posted 2002-04-09 02:24 AM


"All and all
we never go back
Not after the first touch
Never after the last"

Regret does nothing, as you and I have talked about. See the past for what it is, and work on the present, while preparing for the future. Sorry, ramble. After that first touch.... it's terribly difficult to stop. And after the last... why not have some more? Is there truely a last then?

"I'm just a little girl"

Don't we all at times wish we could go back to being young? For some, an age of innocence; for others, an age of simplicity. For others... simply less experiences. How many of us had much forced on us so sooner then seems right?

My memina, a good write. Much enjoyed.

Your's Truely,
Mon Verite


"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (04-09-2002 02:25 AM).]

Dark Enchantress
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10 posted 2002-04-09 07:05 AM


Darling, sometimes you take my words far too literally. I was being sarcastic.

"I never claimed to be your savior
I said I had a dirty mouth
Stop analyzing my behavior
If you’re too dumb to work it out"
Garbage

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11 posted 2002-04-10 01:26 AM


"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

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