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What do you think of me now?
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What do you think of me now? |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677
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What do you think of me now? Now that you know all about me Does it change what I am to you? Does it change what you see inside me? I hate knowing my world could crumble With the parting of your lips With a movement of your mouth There my secrets slip To the ears of the nearest gossip Waiting ofr something to spread Then its all over school And reality becomes what I dread Living a lie is more fun Than telling all my problems to you I never think you'll believe me But its all way too true... This is for my "best friend"... *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh... brilliant. It gave me goosebumps.  I love how descriptive you were in the second stanza of words. Very well done, this whole poem was quite creative. Oh and I noticed your reply pattern. It's great to reply to everyone, I'm glad that you are. But a word of advice, reply to everyone before you post your own. That way, you don't bury your own post below all the ones you reply to. Just do your replies, and leave yours right on top. That's my tip for the day.~Allan Love is like the wind; it can suddenly blow softly in your face or it can come strong. ~~Aaron (Low Man's Lyric) [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 04-11-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Thanks Allan, but I dont mind. I figure if its any good, it'll make its way back up there. Thanks though! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The dedication at the end was what really made this powerful. you used soem great images and the poem flowed well. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You know I've never been in this situation (my friends and family always say I'm too secretive), but I've always feared it. Not really about the gossip at school but instead that their words will hurt me personally. I wish you well with this. Oh by the way....great poem.  I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :) |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is a great description of what being the gossip round school is like... hang in there... oh and great job on the poem. Andrew " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is such a powerful poem. It hit home.. hard. I understand what you're saying, and I understand about the fear of secrets being discovered. Very nice job! --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful tribute to your best friend. i liked this a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
i know exactly what you mean. great poem by the way. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
AmAzInG Poem!! This is mostly how i feel right now. Sometimes its just way too hard to open up to people cuz it gives them the ability to hurt you...ugh...but thats life. Excellent poem! |
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