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Balance
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Balance” Balance of powere to restore ones soul Knowing its importance as the greatest role It joins all things in haromy Like the waves of the sea For there to be light there must be darkness We cannot have one or the other for then its all a mess See one can’t exist with out the other just like there can be no child without a mother then there can be no living without dying if this is what you seek then you better stop trying for it will be to late in the end and life you will be unable to mend the shadows we face are cast by the light will we ever see this, to know it is right? To feel the balance, the order of life Without this we shall fall to schyth While living in this balance we never truly die Feeling the nature of things, is what we must try Being one with all we leave our legacy behind As a true human beign who let their spirit shine The Balance of narture, the order of ways Is the only way to live through these days Find the balance, the Yin/Yang of your heart And upon this path you shall start. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Very nice job here, the flow was a bit broken and stuffs but other than that, wording was excellentay.  ~Carly NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
It was a good poem, but could have had a better pattern or a little more flow. Other than that it was pretty good. *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Perfect! I know exactly what you are saying, I agree 100%. The shadows we see are cast by the light....   ~Allan Love is like the wind; it can suddenly blow softly in your face or it can come strong. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Truly excellent my dear. I love how your mind works. I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :) |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The flow breaks off in a couple places but the concept of this poem and of this set of poems is what i really like. without the concept of evil there would be no concept of goodness. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
As everyone said, the flow does break in a few spots, but other than that this is a very well written piece. Nicely done. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
not to be redundant but ill say the flow was off as well. other than that great poem. everything is skin deep |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The flow was a bit off, but the message wasn't. Wonderful job.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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