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Secsyy lil angel
Junior Member

since 2000-05-30

Posts 36
Portland Oregon, USA

0 posted 2001-04-10 06:25 PM

The stars above are shining
Like diamonds in the heavenly sky
Below I rest as I stare up above
Dreaming of the boy I could call my love

I close my eyes and I can see him
His dark eyes staring right through mine
I look at him, such a handsom face
On which kisses i could gently place

A warm feeling runs through me
As I imagine him taking my hand
Gently leading me into his arms
Keeping me safe, never to be harmed

I dream of the nights he would call me
Spending hours on the phone
Talking about useless things
Yet to me such happiness it brings

Sometimes I wonder if he's even out there
Thinking of me like I do of him
I hope one day destiny will prove true
And I will be able to find you

My dream boy

~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~

*~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~*

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-04-10 06:27 PM

Nice poem. I know how you're feeling.( except for the boy part) He's out there, you just have to find him. Good luck and keep writing.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-10 06:55 PM

I must say that I love the last stanza, and ending line. This is very creative, very well thought-out. Well done.
Aside from that I'll say you had a good scheme of rhyme.

~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-04-10 08:03 PM

simple wrods make an awesome poem
i love it
i love it
i love it
Just wait girl, he'll come around

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

4 posted 2001-04-10 08:07 PM

I liked your poem, it was great. I can relate to how you're feeling (except im waiting for a girl!).

"Eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die"

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-10 08:07 PM

Very nice job on this one. This is very sweet. Good luck on finding him.. I'm sure you will

Very nicely written.

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-04-10 11:46 PM

This was written in a simple form but was very sweet and easy to relate to. i liked this a lot and i hope you find him eventually.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

7 posted 2001-04-10 11:58 PM

Angel, i liked this alot..
Hi, I am Jeff..I love LOVE poems, if you will, and this one was great.
It had a great rythme scheme, worked well.
He will come, i found mine, and there was a point when i wondered the same thing, but trust me, he will come.
Believe in yourself.
Dont just go searching for love, it will find you
thats my advice,
keep posting, hope to see more from ya
Jeff

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

8 posted 2001-04-11 12:10 PM

aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww..thats such a sweet poem..

i guess we're all dreaming of a guy like that...good job!

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

9 posted 2001-04-11 10:17 AM

I love it! But trust me, very few have found the perfect guy, so join the club! J/K!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

10 posted 2001-04-11 11:13 AM

i'm with everyone else

I loved it..great job. keep posting

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

11 posted 2001-04-11 11:31 AM

dream boys are very sexy and super amazing ppl. (i know for a fact) we all have a dream boy or girl we just have to find them.....and you will!
Regina
PS amazing work!

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

12 posted 2001-04-11 07:11 PM

------> Dream guy <------

Very well done. I liked the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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