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silvrduck
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since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

0 posted 2001-04-09 11:14 PM

Eehhh...
----

whispers of a sown heart
stolen crudely in the dark
it’s a hard way to lie
vanilla realms, left her mark

so laugh, little ones
rigid appendages of fun
it’s a rueful way to die
baffled riches, to think won

squander an every dream
she’ll take on every extreme
it’s a lonely way to cry
when wrong, what I seem

taken back, truth to require
warrant ditto wont be a liar
but it’s a long way to try
conceal such desperate desire

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

[This message has been edited by silvrduck (edited 04-09-2001).]

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-09 11:55 PM

Haha..... when I read "Eehhh..." my mind read it as a duck sound. haha

The poem itself is more than "eehhh" worthy. Pretty good job, but not the best I have seen from you.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-10 01:24 AM

I loved this poem. So creative and well done. I fully enjoyed this poem.
Wowish!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-04-10 02:25 AM

great poem! i really liked it. keep writing

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-04-10 09:00 AM

This certainly isn't your best but it is still a good poem. i liked the flow of the last two stanzas especially. i hadn't seen you around the last few days and i was glad to read something from you this morning. keep posting your work

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-10 08:45 PM

Very nice poem!
I enjoyed the read, and I look forward to reading more work from you.

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-04-11 05:50 PM

i like this, nice rythem and such..keep writing..and ill keep replying!
<3 kim

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