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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2001-04-09 11:14 PM


Note: This is really crappy but it's basic and that's all I can get from this topic. I like this girl in one of my classes so I just spilled out some stuff again. You know the deal.

Nancy's got lustful lips
and a beautiful smile
Swinging hips and
perfect eyeshadow
Nails always done
and long wavy hair
She wants to be
a stripper after high school
and a playboy bunny
It's always been her thing
She's got the look
Not that I've noticed

I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :)

© Copyright 2001 Morgana - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-09 11:54 PM


Hehehe..... I like the last line.  It's a bit innocent... very good job.  
We always fall for the ones we can't have, eh?  *sigh...*  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-04-10 12:03 PM


Who ever said I can't have her?  

I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :)

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3 posted 2001-04-10 01:03 AM


Oh hey now that was a nice reply dark, haha.
Great poem! I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
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viginia
4 posted 2001-04-10 08:32 AM


tee hee.  i like this one a lot, the mood isn't as dark as most of your work but it's just as well written as evrything else.  keep writing beautiful poetry.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-04-10 08:59 PM


lol @ Dark.  Nice attitude about it.. You'll go far with that  
As for the poem, I think you did a very nice job.. it's nice to see a change in the ambiance of your poetry.  Nice job.

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul."  --Emily Dickinson

Ina
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6 posted 2001-04-10 09:44 PM


hahahahahahahaha.....this was great. definate mood uplifter. very different. library piece.

Regina

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7 posted 2001-05-10 06:51 PM


ha ha
that wasn't nice to say
put me in a better mood though  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

anonymousfemale
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8 posted 2002-11-09 06:50 AM


Ohhh I like this. very nice.

~AF~

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cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
9 posted 2003-01-14 12:10 PM


heh, I loved the last line too...good one Jaime

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10 posted 2003-01-31 07:53 PM


Heh... I enjoyed this piece, Memina. It seems slightly different then your normal pieces (what I've read), but yet, still, similar. What inspired it? Just a passing glance/impression of a person?

~Titus

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
                 --Aldous Huxley

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