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fractal007
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0 posted 2001-04-09 04:55 AM


This is it, final takeoff for the end of the "End of the World" series.  This is the first installment of what will probably be a concluding trilogy or something...





"We are born again!"
Call in the back of my mind
1 million years


Vague memories of such sorrow
"Get in, make haste, the end approaches!  NOW!"
Old fears of worlds of tomorrow
"Goodbye my darling sweet.  Goodbye.  Fairwell."

That stone angel hanging by strings
She used to be so beautiful
I was the great queen of such things
"Get down!  Get off!  Our dad will kill us now!"


From the caves we came
We slept an age in a night
We left hell behind


A Glorious glowing figure
"You will be queen and mother now!"
"This is your destiny, your end."
And so ends the light and figure

Soon
Soon......


"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

[This message has been edited by fractal007 (edited 04-09-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-04-09 10:13 AM


Ahhh!     Scary man.  hehe  
I am loving this series!  There are so many aspects of this poem that glow with talent.
"That stone angel hanging by strings
She used to be so beautiful
I was the great queen of such things
'Get down!  Get off!  Our dad will kill us now!'"

This stanza hit me hard.     You are very creative... I love it.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

chas
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2 posted 2001-04-09 11:33 AM


that is a great poem, i really like your writing style, i got the meaning of the poem and you express it very well..take care.
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3 posted 2001-04-09 06:58 PM


This is very well written, frac!  I'm really enjoying the series too.  You have a unique writing style, and one I always look forward to reading.  Nice job  

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul."  --Emily Dickinson

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4 posted 2001-04-09 08:31 PM


Nicely done here. I enjoyed this a lot frac. It's funny how you say that this is the conclusion....most likely a trilogy ...and then say OR SOMETHING.....meaning this could just last FOREVER...even you don't know when it ends haha.
I like this series though. Any ideas on another one?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fractal007
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5 posted 2001-04-10 04:04 AM


Thanks, guys, for the replies.  This concluding trilogy will be a sort of synopsis of some story ideas I have.  I've just been conjuring them up and thinking that it would be good to jot them down in the form of poetry first before I undertake any major writing projects.[prose stuff]

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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