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Disgruntled
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0 posted 2001-04-08 04:53 PM



You push me away,
For a better view you say,
After inviting me into your life,
I don't understand it,

What do you feel,

You've reopenned that crack,
In the dam of my heart,
The one you so recently sealed,
From whence these words pour forth,

I love you,
But you doubt yourself,
You want to become better friends,
Yet make no effort for the goal,

You don't seem to understand,
The implications of this turn-about,
I feel like its something that I did,
Its my fault you want some space,

My fault that I risk losing,
You whom I seek,
My fault that I run the chance,
Of forever being apart,

Now I realize the truth of it all,
For I was granted the infamous role,
That of the rebound,
In which our chances were squandered by hasty fate,

Tear me apart,
For now I may rebuild myself,
A fresh start,
Yet never wholely healed,

The dam is bursting,
The dike is cracked,
My heart is breaking,
But will you come back,

I can only wait.


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I only submit songs
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1 posted 2001-04-08 05:05 PM


very nice
Fading Away
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2 posted 2001-04-08 05:08 PM


"I love you,
But you doubt yourself,
You want to become better friends,
Yet make no effort for the goal,"

This is beautiful!  A very nice post.  Sometimes all we can do it wait... Very nicely done.  I can't wait to read more!

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul."  --Emily Dickinson

silvrduck
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3 posted 2001-04-08 05:29 PM


I think this poem just gave me a smack in the head. A hard one. hmmm..
Anyways, this is a great poem! Thanks for sharing it.. and please do post more!  

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

I only submit songs
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4 posted 2001-04-08 06:05 PM



Disgruntled
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5 posted 2001-04-08 08:40 PM


thanks guys but its my hope that you wont see any more of these up.  i only write when i feel depressed and a need to vent and share.  i thought that id be able to put away the pen for a while but it seems that isnt to be.  thanks anyways guys
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6 posted 2001-04-08 09:44 PM


"The dam is bursting,
The dike is cracked,
My heart is breaking,
But will you come back,

I can only wait"

It really sucks to be in this kind of situation, but you describe it so well. I hope that you find it in yourself to write whenever you feel happy, or whenever you feel anything! You write really well, and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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7 posted 2001-04-09 10:17 AM


Great job!  This is the first of your poems I have read.  I look forward to more!

*~*Me*~*

banburycross
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8 posted 2001-04-09 02:54 PM


This is a great poem, although it alwyas sucks to be in a situation like this.  great writing and i hope things get better.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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9 posted 2001-04-09 08:01 PM


very well done.......I found this to be quite a depressing read and I surely do hope things get better for you. I enjoyed this poem greatly though, and hope to see some happy poems someday.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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