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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-04-08 02:26 PM


I see you I wanna touch you
but your just another vision in my dream
And when ever it starts to rain
I wanna call you
but I don’t know your name
Now it feels like the bridge from my heart to you
Has been destroyed

I feel you I wanna know you
But there’s no way to hold your hand
And you are like a rainbow
Cause with out you
There’s is no tomorrow
Now it feels like a storm broke my heart in two
Forever more

Every time I look in a beauty magazine
There’s pictures of you surrounding me
Every time I turn on the Television
There you are, you seem like an hallucination  


© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-08 03:17 PM


Nicely done.......I like this a lot.
It combines with your alias.
Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2001-04-08 09:32 PM


  Very good here...I liked it lots. Smile!
  ~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

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viginia
3 posted 2001-04-09 02:09 PM


I liked this a lot.  there's a lot in this poem and it is very well written.  keep writing and posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away
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4 posted 2001-04-09 08:30 PM


Another great poem from you.. I liked this one a lot.  Keep posting!  I love reading what you have to share.  

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul."  --Emily Dickinson

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5 posted 2001-04-13 07:00 PM


OK now, who's the celebrity crush?
I'd really like to know  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-04-14 01:10 AM


nicely written. good job
LoneWolf
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7 posted 2001-04-14 01:26 AM


i liked this alot. i can totally relate to this. well anyways great job on the poem

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

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