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Broken Hearted
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
Broken Hearted you said i love you here and there yet i know you never cared you took my heart and broke it apart you left me hopeless and in the dark every night tears for you i would cry each tear fell as i remebered the lies you told me you would never leave my side but you left with my heart and your pride the pain inside that i felt was so immense the hole in my heart you made was dense i felt as if someone came and took my soul it was you, you were the one that stole you took my heart and ran far, far away you left, and left me here to stay why i ever let you in, i don't know but now my heart is mended and is ready to grow now someone new has come along and i don't cry when i hear our song i want to thank you though for everything, because of you i can glow you see, to glow is a wonderful thing i can fly now with loves light wings even though you broke my heart i can go on, and make a new start |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
This poem is so sad but sweet. I've been through this too. What those lying theifs fail to realize is that we can get back on our feet and thanks to them we're not quite so blind. <3~*Rachael*~<3 |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great poem. It's very sad, but I'm glad that things got better. Good luck at starting again... and good job on the poem. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Very bittersweet,like most emotions. i really liked this one. great job! Death is but an escape from loneliness |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem but felt that the flow broke off and resumed in a few places....so it wasn't that consistant. ANyhow I felt you did just fine.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, *Hug* Okay now that you got your hug back to the poem  . This is a great poem even if it is sad. I liked it, the poem that is. Until your next -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
I liked the poem, very heartfelt, even though it was a little sad. Good work. "Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This has great emotion in it and conveyed a sense of sadness to the reader ery well. good poem, keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm glad you're being strong about it. I love your last line. Hope things are better now for you. Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Loved this. Good lines, good lines. Keep that head up, always lookin toward the light! ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Very sad, but very well said. *S*Staci |
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