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princess^sarah
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0 posted 2001-04-06 08:52 PM


Come to my Sabbath,
an old woman calls,
before its too late.

The Sabbath is dark,
and held at midnight,
and all is on fire,
and majic os performed.

Witches and warlocks,
come from around,
for this special night,
once a year.

Leave from the Sabbath,
a young girl cries,
before it's too late,
or your bound to die.


i hope no-one takes any sorta offense to this..


© Copyright 2001 sarah alford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-06 09:46 PM


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2 posted 2001-04-06 09:47 PM


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princess^sarah
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3 posted 2001-04-06 10:31 PM


?????????????????? whats the ? for
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4 posted 2001-04-06 10:58 PM


^ What is that all about?

Good job, Sarah.
I liked this..
Keep sharing.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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5 posted 2001-04-06 11:45 PM


hahahaha i was jus messin wit u it meant i liked the poem well in a way      
anyways keep writin...it was different but nice
and sorry if i offended u. i be trippen like that at times pplz understand me hehe      

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6 posted 2001-04-07 03:09 AM


Besides some spelling errors in the second stanza, I thought you did rather well with this one. Not your best, but nonetheless a good read.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

AngelShell
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7 posted 2001-04-07 03:22 AM


I liked it, is there any kinda "Supernatural forum"?  There should be.
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8 posted 2001-04-07 01:27 PM


Yes, I'll agree with Shell... although this may even fit in Spiritual.  
Don't mind Albert, Sarah...  he's a wierdo, we're all learning to love him though.  
Oh and don't mind Dopey... he is very honest, the fact that he's comfortable telling you what is and isn't your best shows that he respects your talent greatly.
Don't mind me..... I'm just replying.  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

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9 posted 2001-04-07 04:08 PM


The sabbath...is a jewish term used to describe the day of resting. I dont understand at all where this fits.
Im sorry...but im jewish. I really dont think sabbath was the right word to use for this poem. The sabbath is a day of rest and joy. please dont take offense to this reply...but im quite intersted in way you used a holy day in this poem.
please email me (skatergirlz14@aol.com)
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10 posted 2001-04-07 09:44 PM


no ina, i think poetry is like the way escapin from life the freedom to write
and must religion take away that freedom?
poetry is expression and i wish it stays that way no rules in poetry only freedom of expression from the mind.... i too have belief in my heart but i don't let that interfere wit my poetry.

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