Seduction of Music's Passion

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AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

0 posted 2001-04-06 07:02 AM

The following is basically how I feel about music, along with writing it is my biggest passion.
It does need help with the title however.

Inside my hallow room,
My Guitar by my side,
Call to all who dream of listening,
Call to all who I can confide.
My voice is my message,
To a world so torn with strife,
Absorbed into the anger,
A shallow attempt at salvation of life.

I write as if I mean it,
I sing as if to save,
I play as if they’ll listen,
But I live as if a slave.

The words they make no difference,
Only the notes can be understood,
Live as though it’s the last,
Listen as though no one else could.
My passion is my guidance,
If only it could live for me,
Due to this seduction,
My true self you may never see.

I write as if I mean it,
I sing as if to save,
I play as if they’ll listen,
But I live as if a slave.

I do as I’m told during the day,
My only deliverance comes at night,
At night when I can escape,
And let the music be my light.
It holds me safe in remembrance,
Of things I once may have known,
Things that don’t act as rocks,
In this river of my life to which I drown.

But I write as if I mean it,
And I sing as if to save,
I play as if they’ll listen,
But I’ll always be a slave.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-04-06 07:37 AM

This is very beautiful piece and the repitition is used very effectively. Good woek and keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-06 01:40 PM

This was an amazing song. I truly enjoyed this one. You play guitar? That's sexy. I do too....
Anyhow, GREAT job on this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

3 posted 2001-04-06 11:15 PM

yes I play the guitar.

Thanks you two.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-04-10 06:01 PM

Amazing Angel
totally amazing
~*stands up and applauds*~

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

5 posted 2001-04-10 06:38 PM

Heh..... once again, we need more words that rhyme with "life." I always laugh at that.... the poor English language.

Well I think you did a good job on this one!  I especially like the alternating forms in each stanza.
And Javier's right... playing guitar is sexy!
*inches towards Javier*

~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Attack Ferrit
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since 2001-04-09

Posts 41
texas

6 posted 2001-04-10 07:40 PM

wow great post. i really like the last full stanza... and the first satanza... and the other ones... its just really good!

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

7 posted 2001-04-10 08:09 PM

Wow nice poem. Keep posting em.

"Eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die"

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-04-10 09:17 PM

great poem michelle i liked it keep writing

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

9 posted 2001-04-10 09:43 PM

guitar is amazing. i live for a couple of things and music is one of them. amazing song.
Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

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