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fractal007
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0 posted 2001-04-06 05:17 AM


NOTE:  Continuation of "Failure".  These little haikus/tankas/senryus are a concluding chapter to my "End of the World Series."  I couldn't muster up the creative strength to write down the pure emotion that I have for the conclusion, so I'm doing it in modules.  Perhaps later I will do it in a final poem




All there was was war
My failure all around me
The climax of hate
But a man has come to save
Brutal murders spawn his hate

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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AngelShell
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1 posted 2001-04-06 05:26 AM


A nice continuation...but jeeze, do you have to make 'em so long?  


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2 posted 2001-04-06 01:36 PM


I like these frac.
Nicely done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-04-07 12:40 PM


I've seen a lot of short ones from you lately.. Usually I'm not a fan of real short poems, but this is another very well done poem.  Keep it up..

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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4 posted 2001-04-08 02:52 PM


Very nicely done, Frac!  I really like Tankas, this one is marvelous.  
I enjoy the series a lot... hope you get to make that concluding poem soon.  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

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