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anonymous albert ?
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0 posted 2001-04-06 03:17 AM





nothing more to follow
in my endless life in sorrow
as this life i lead
jus left my heart to fled
leaving me hopeless, knowing i can’t escape fate
making my life lay more a strait
as the lost heart in tears of scars left me in pain
cause i can’t simply find anything to quite explain
why so many tears had to be shed
reminscing on how much this heart has bled
though i’m still in that same path in weary
struggling to survive in my constant misery


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princess^sarah
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1 posted 2001-04-06 03:26 AM


this is really good
your a really great poet
keep up the good work!

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viginia
2 posted 2001-04-06 08:07 AM


This poem is good but i've read better ones from you.  if i could make a suggestion, i think if you don't concentrate so much on making this one rhyme it would be a more powerful poem.  good job and keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-04-06 10:25 AM


Good job...
I'll agree that this one isn't the best one I've read from you, but still a job well done.
Keep posting.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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4 posted 2001-04-06 01:33 PM


It was ok. Not your best but a good read to say the least.

Hope to see more!  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-04-06 04:07 PM


yea but thanks     all 4 them replys but 2 get this poem. i wrote from the heart.as u gotta been there and in there 2 get the full of it..... also thank u sarah 4 ur reply i apreciate ur thoughts  

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6 posted 2001-04-09 05:52 AM


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