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ethel lahootie
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since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

0 posted 2001-04-05 08:31 PM

~say whatever...it mite suck but o wel...im jus "venting"~

Nothing I am
is worth anything at all
I try to climb upwards
But every time I fall
No matter what is done
And how much I try
I will never be anything
That's why I cry
I'm never a help
But always in the way
Life seems more pointless
Everyday
Trying to improve
I still carry on
And in the end
I'm always strong
But as life goes on
With everything I sought
I too often realize
Everything I'm not

Empty tears
Member

since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

1 posted 2001-04-05 10:58 PM

I have to say that i think all of us have felt this way @ sometime.its good 2 vent. Good poem,good flow,Just Good!
~Brittany~

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

2 posted 2001-04-06 05:01 AM

Wow, this was good. Venting is an art, I believe that whole heartedly.

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

3 posted 2001-04-06 05:22 AM

Going against the disciplines of the sciences, I will give you this advice.

Be more than the sum or your parts.

Sometimes the accomplishment is in trying to win the prize.

Good poem, nonetheless.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-04-06 07:50 AM

Excellent flow and rhyme in this was. I really liked this piece and i thought you did a wonderful job with it. kssp writing and posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-06 10:28 AM

Gotta love the venting poems...
This is a good poem, I loved the flow.
Keep writing.. it helps

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-06 01:45 PM

I think you did great on this poem. Very nicely done. I enjoyed it. It made me go "Ooooo aaaaaaa"

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

7 posted 2001-04-06 04:19 PM

thank ya much u ppls! dopey ur crazy! thanks again! ~ jo ~

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

8 posted 2001-04-06 05:25 PM

Dang chica. It's good, pretty mean about yourself, but I understand...I think...

lol gotta go freeeeeze!! bye!
Bel

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

9 posted 2001-04-06 08:49 PM

yeah kt! go and fa-reeeeeeeeeeeze (sorta like in comp prog) but me...im goin to BURN! hehe

have fun! ~ jo~

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-04-10 05:43 PM

This is a really good one
you've made me a big fan of your poems
i do hope to see more
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

11 posted 2001-04-10 06:26 PM

I did enjoy it! For once my critical mouth is being kept shut.

This poem is as good as it's going to get.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

12 posted 2001-04-10 06:44 PM

ummm...allan i think that i will take this in a good way...so dont tell me if it wasnt supposed to be taken in a good way ok? THANKS for replying everyone ~ jo~

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

13 posted 2001-04-12 01:41 PM

I know i felt like this many times and its definately a crappy feeling. I hope things get better for you but great poem...and VENTING is good!!

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

14 posted 2001-04-12 01:43 PM

Hey,

Well I don’t know what your not but you are a great poet and this is a great poem J keep up the excellent job. Until your next poem
-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

15 posted 2001-04-12 04:45 PM

I agree that we have all felt this way. That's what makes this poem so great - we can all totally relate to it. You write well when you vent

Keep it up.
~K~

"Don't spoons just make you smile? My friend is more of a FORK person, the butterknife makes me cry..." -Hallucinations in Blond

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