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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-04-04 06:06 PM



Where am I supposed to go?
Where am I supposed to see?
Where am I supposed to meet
The destiny that awaits for me?

What am I supposed to learn?
What am I supposed to hear?
What am I supposed to know
That will keep me safe from fear?

Who am I supposed to be?
Who am I supposed to touch?
Who am I supposed to free
That means to me so much?

Why am I supposed to feel?
Why am I supposed to love?
Why am I supposed to be
Strong as a lion, yet graceful as a dove?

When am I supposed to know?
When am I supposed to see?
When am I supposed to fly,
To see what I will see?

How am I supposed to finish
All the things I have begun?
If only I could drop these questions,
Just drop them all and run.

It can't be!
He exists..
Master of the Oceans!
It's..
Leviathan...

© Copyright 2001 Adam Kamerer - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-04 06:11 PM


Yea this poem was full of questions man. I liked it though. I thought the ending was great. Nicely done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-04-04 07:54 PM


I really like the repitition here.  Very nice job... a lot of questions are presented.  Good luck on finding the answers.  Nicely done.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2001-04-05 04:52 PM


I really like your last stanza in this one.  Good job on the poem  

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"  
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banburycross
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4 posted 2001-04-05 05:11 PM


I really like this poem a lot, and i especially like the ending of it.  if i were to make a suggestion it would be to change await in the the first stanza to wait, but that's just me.  nice job, keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-04-28 11:51 PM


All these questions is part of growing up.  I guess we try to find ourselves at this time in life.  This was a great read.  thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-04-30 02:47 PM


i enjoyed this read lots...
great poem..

and for the questions,they will all go away soon as we depart..muhahaha

hehe...just kidding...keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

anonymousfemale
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7 posted 2001-04-30 02:49 PM


So many questions that every single person will ask at least one stage in their life.
Thanks for a read that I really needed to see right now.

~AF~

" Your mother's in here with us Karras. Would you like to leave a message? I'll see that she gets it."
The Devil - The Exorcist

AngelShell
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not heaven nor hell so...
8 posted 2001-04-30 11:01 PM


I liked this, it was really great.
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