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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-04-04 05:09 PM


Sometimes I feel what we have ain’t gonna last
Because everything around is moving so fast
So I close my eyes and counts to ten
And then I open my heart once again

Each time we’re apart I think of you and smile
Because I know you are worth every mile
So I wish upon the brightest star I see
Knowing you are in the air I breather

Baby I want you to know
What ever I do where I go
I want you to
Hold your hand upon your heart
And let my love make you strong

I can feel every move you make
Every step you take
I know that our love isn’t by faith


© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-04 05:57 PM


I liked this. Some spelling errors that disrupted the flow, but all in all it was a good poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
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2 posted 2001-04-05 10:50 PM


Oh, good job on this

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"  
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3 posted 2001-04-17 09:48 PM


Nice and sweet.  I see a lot of romantics here in Passions lately  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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