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0 posted 2001-04-04 04:46 PM


Space Mission.

Catapulted, Slingshot,
Far into space,
Government denials,
They try to save their face,
Mission aborted,
Never did exist,
Rumours are reported,
As the families resist,
Brainwashing television,
A government cover up,
Who made up this decision,
They must have been corrupt,
A suspicious ending,
To silence all the news,
Of a failed space mission,
And the death of both their crews.

Do I know something that you don't? I don't think so... I think I just had a very weird dream.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

© Copyright 2001 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-04-04 06:06 PM


this is wicked cool! LOL might want to watch the syllable use cuz u start out with a scheme but hey what the hell(o) it's your poem right? LOL nice job  

Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

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2 posted 2001-04-04 06:09 PM


Or maybe you had a dream about something you know that we don't.....who knows.

I liked this one. Very ogirinal.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-04-04 07:56 PM


Woohoo!  Very nice job!  This is interesting.. very unique and a pleasure to read.  Keep posting.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

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4 posted 2001-04-05 06:40 PM


Must have been a fun dream.     It certainly was an entertaining and unique poem.
Nice job.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

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5 posted 2001-04-07 07:20 AM


Thanks for the great critiques guys, Its always a great pleasure to post on passions. And it was an absoloutly weird dream.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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6 posted 2001-04-07 05:34 PM


Hey, nice job on this poem!  Governments are probably always covering things up.  Maybe we have to dream things to find out the truth?  hmmmmmm...........

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7 posted 2001-04-07 09:41 PM


  Yep, syllable count was iffy, but the rest was magnificent! Hehehe......insane dreams rock.
  ~Carly

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