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Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream

0 posted 2001-04-03 10:46 PM


Forever In Love

My only expense is I can't see
Can't see love when it hits me
Forever and ever in all infinity
Love is stored deep inside of me
She makes my heart flee
My love for her is stronger than me

I told her my feelings that were inside me
And at that moment I was set free
But it was too late for me
I waited to long and left her be
I don't blame her for not waiting for me
I hope next I will be able to see
See love when it hits me
Forever and ever in all infinity
Love is stored deep inside of me


I wrote this poem because I didn't tell this girl how I felt and when I did it was too late, and for people that can relate to how I feel.

"It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown

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1 posted 2001-04-03 11:02 PM


First off...WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Im so happy that you joined us!!
Great first post....love can be tough but if its all for the right person, its all worth it. Great job and i look forward to reading more from u!!

Low Man's Lyric
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2 posted 2001-04-03 11:03 PM


Thank you.

"It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown

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3 posted 2001-04-03 11:23 PM


Welcome to Passions!
I really liked the way you wrote the poem. I have never been in this situation. I am more of the type that seizes the moment when I can.....but.....I did learn about this by watching my friends go through it. I've also experienced situations SORTA like this....when I was younger I never told anybody anything about who i liked and so on. so the girls kept on coming and going.
ANyhow, welcome to passions and I hope to see you reply and post a lot here.
ENjoy your stay and watch out for acire, and allan....they tend to be a little reeeeerish.  
Oh and if you'd like go to TEEN EXPLORER and check it out.....there's cake there....or at least there was....we think Walt ate it....but hey.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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viginia
4 posted 2001-04-04 08:51 AM


Welcome to passions!!  this is a good first post and one that many people, myself included, can relate to.  keep writing and posting, i look forward to seeing more from you.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-04-04 12:05 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS....hope u like it here
and i liked the poem and DOPEY w'sup wit the cakes and chips and stuff i never seen any?
anyways keep writin  

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-04-04 12:12 PM


Welcome to Passions
I'd watch out for Dopey more, he spreads lies about cake and things.  we all know he ate it.  Your poem was very good, it potrayed the emotons well.  Nice job, post some more

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"  
Unknown

Elvenblood
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7 posted 2001-04-04 01:55 PM


    Wow, I know exactly how you feel!! BELIEVE ME! ad thank you for osting this.  I was lucky enough to get a second chance 3 years after I lost my obvious chance...be happy witht what you have, and learn rom what you're feeling.

No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee

Low Man's Lyric
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8 posted 2001-04-04 07:23 PM


Thanks for the warm welcoming. I think im going to like posting here!!

"It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown

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9 posted 2001-04-04 08:11 PM


Welcome to Passions!  

This is a good poem.  I hope you stay for a long time in this Family of Friends    Ok, so that was corny, but welcome and I hope to read more from you.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Ina
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10 posted 2001-04-04 10:33 PM


welcome to passions!amazing poem!
canadians rock!
regina

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11 posted 2001-04-05 01:20 PM


  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!   Yer gonna luv it here...I know we all do! This was a great first post...ah love..*sigh* But one thing, I thought the constant rhyming of the same thingy was a bit much. Welll..see ya 'round!
  ~Carly

Many miles behind my eyelashes, there always seems to be
the strangest things, the slightly sane, that only I can see...

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12 posted 2001-04-05 01:28 PM


Hey,

   Welcome to Passions this is a nice start keep this up and you will be great here I know you will like it.

   -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

silvrduck
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13 posted 2001-04-05 03:12 PM


Ahh, I thought I already replied to this.. OOPS.  
I think this is a really great poem. It expresses your feelings very well.. though I'm sorry this happened to you. Great job, Keep posting!
(and WELCOME TO PASSIONS!   )

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

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14 posted 2001-04-05 06:44 PM


Ah, quite the interesting poem here.  I read your other, and I must say that I like this one quite a bit less than your other one.  I think it's because of the rhyme scheme on this one, it gets a bit old rather quickly.  
Maybe it's just me, don't hate me for being the crytical one... you'll soon learn it's just my place in here.  
Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  Check your email for a special greeting on our behalf.  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

AngelShell
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not heaven nor hell so...
15 posted 2001-04-06 05:34 AM


WELCOME, WELCOME, WELCOME!

Wow, there was a lot of "e" sounds...
I'm starting not to make sense much...

good poem *claps* well done *claps again*...

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16 posted 2001-04-06 05:30 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Glad to see you decided to join us.  Hope you enjoy Passions in Poetry as much as we do.  Happy sharing and reading too  

I can see you'll fit in just right already
great post
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream
17 posted 2001-05-07 11:30 PM


Thanks all.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."  
~Anonymous

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