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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Hide me from the pain, Hide me from the shadows, Hide me from the rain. Hide me from the bloodshed, Hide me from the hurt, Hide me from the heartbreak, Hide me from the dirt, Hide me from the darkness, Hide me from the ghost, Hide me from suffering, Hide me from the host, Hide me from forever, Hide me from the chance, Hide me from life itself, Hide me from death’s lance, Hide me from myself, Hide me what I am, I don’t want to see, What a coward I’ve turned out to be. It can't be! |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Wow, this is really powerful, maybe one of the most powerful I have read yet. I think starting with the same two words "Hide me" really made it drive home. It showed that there was an imagery there that was so...deep...you were desperately trying to hide from every one and every thing yet in the end it was only yourself that you wanted release from. Well done, this is brilliant. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Actually, its not about me. Allen Riverwood probably knows who it's about. Anyway, thanks for the compliments. It can't be! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh yeah... this would be big Eddy the Bard.  I thought this was the most original of the series so far, because it focused on his ability, and drew a parallel with his personality. It works out great... I love trying to catch the character just by the title. Very nice job on this one especially, I look forward to the others! ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem! I thought you did wonderful on this one. Very impressive work here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Ahh, but did you know Allan Mr. expert that his real name's Gilbert? I have the a foreign copy of the game :-) Another example is that Golbez is really named Golbeze. Anyway, a very good poem though No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Heh..I knew that. But did you know that Edge's real name is Edward Geraldine? It can't be! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Awesome.....simply awesome what a wonderful treat "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
yeah, this is a awesome poem. nice work *S* Staci |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
great poem!!!! i think that this is one of my favorites i've read by you. keep it up man!!! lots of love, dana |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great poem, Kosetsu. Probably one of the best I've seen from you. The way you used the italics throughout except the last line was powerful. Very nicely done! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is definetely one of my favorites by you, i liked this poem a whole lot. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome great poem.i liked it.keepw riting  |
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