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Ski*Chick
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Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

0 posted 2001-03-31 10:27 PM


Your a really good friend
I don't know how to explain our friendship
your there for me bad and good times
your there when my fake friends are being jerks
we talk you always bring a smile onto my face
even when I'm about to cry
I can tell you anything you don't tell anyone
I like that in a friend
I always look forward to seeing you online
then when you come online I smile
even when I'm sick I some how talk to you
if there was a forever then we could talk forever
but in this world there is no forever
I only wish there was a forever
I try to hook you up with guys
that I'd think you'd like
some guys don't work out
others are shy but they email you
When we both die
I'm sure we will find our way to each other
we will be best friends forever
that I can promise you
I don't care if you like *N sync
I don't care that your in love with a hockey player
that wouldn't be a true friend
I know when your mad
I don't leave you alone I stay with you
we talk about it or atleast try to talk to you
but I would never leave you hanging like others
we are best friends forever
Your friend,
Minna

© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
Linc
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1 posted 2001-03-31 10:33 PM


Hey,

     I LOVE this poem it has to be my favorite of yours. I know your friend must feel very appreciated when she reads this. It seems in life you can only have one true through thick and thin best friend. I hope someday I am as luck as you are and I find mine as you did. (this one is in my library now   )

                            -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Ski*Chick
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2 posted 2001-03-31 10:58 PM


we have been friends for about 5 years, we love to chat about everything. Even though my disability is deadly she wants to be friends until the end of our lifes. But just like in the poem I wrote in heaven I'm sure we will find each other.   If you want to e-mail me you can, I can't tell you much about my disability cause it's hard to explain to people how it affects me. But on my webpage there are pictures of me and my friends. ~*~Minna~*~

It's hard seeing someone loving your ex, when it's your ex friend who's loving him.

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-03-31 11:00 PM


Minna, I think this poem was very cute... it's great to have friends online, who we can simply talk to, no worries about anything else other than a meeting of the minds.  The thoughts in this poem were very good and I am sure your friend will love it.
On a technical note though, I think you have done a better job of creating formats or simple sylliblic evenness to your poetry.  This one was almost a paragraph broken into lines.  It's not a bad thing at all, the poem is beautiful, but I'm pointing that out because I have a reputation to maintain as the jerk who always finds something wrong with the best poetry.  
You have a great heart, Minna.  And your poetry shows it.  
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

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4 posted 2001-04-01 09:49 PM


I really liked this. I think it's great to be so close to somebody like that.
Hope it continues for a life time.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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5 posted 2001-04-02 04:13 PM


You did a really good job here.  I have a friend similar to the one you're talking about online.  It's good to have someone like that.
Nice job.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Ina
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Quebec, Canada
6 posted 2001-04-02 07:05 PM


This was a great poem dedicated to your friend, i hope you show it to her. This is for my libary.

regina

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7 posted 2001-04-11 08:50 PM


Minna, it's nice to know you care for this friend and vice versa
Hey girl, we havent talked in a while
hope to talk to you on aim again  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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