Falling thru love's open cracks

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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2001-03-31 08:43 PM

Ten whole days away from you
Time to clear my mind
And let it all finally sink through
I've been so afraid to let you in
Always thinking my heart would be committing an adultrious sin
But it's funny how the lord works in mysterious ways
Because, My Dear
I'm falling through Love's open cracks
And I never want to look back
I've finally found my best friend
When I look deep within your eyes
I feel like I've even found my home
When I am lying by your side
I love your accent
And the things you do
But most of all I think I'm falling in love with you
Shocking and amazing
Yes I know, but it's one of life's little mysteries
And it's best left unknown....

"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-31 09:45 PM

Wonderful job, Kristen. I especially liked the ending, I think you said it rather well. Some things are just best left unknown.

~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

2 posted 2001-03-31 10:38 PM

Hey,

This is a really GREAT poem. I loved reading it keep them coming. Until your next poem...

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

silvrduck
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since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

3 posted 2001-03-31 11:16 PM

Wow, I really liked this one! hope to read more from you soon, keep up the great work!!

*The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.*

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-04-01 10:11 AM

This is a really good piece, I really enjoyed with it and I found that it was so easy to empathise.
Andrew.

" War is peace,
Freedom is Slavery,
Ignorance is strength" - George Orwell "1984"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-01 11:23 PM

WOw this was so great. I really really loved this poem.
Very nicely written. Kudos to u!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-04-02 04:43 PM

Great job. I like this a lot. I hope to see more from you.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

7 posted 2001-04-02 06:55 PM

This was amazing! the imagery and feelings were very powerful, (thums up) great work!

regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-04-12 07:34 PM

first of all, Lord should be capitalized

secondly, the poem is amazing
see, love will find you no matter what

great write Ceinwyn, beautiful

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

9 posted 2001-04-12 11:42 PM

This is by far my favorite poem from you. You expressed your feelings so perfectly. A great piece of work this is. All the details of falling in love with someone come out so perfectly in this. I feel as if I am speechless. I dont know what to say cause I have so much that I want to say about this. You have the best way with words. Keep up the good work!!

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