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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
You pulled me out of the sorrow you helped me back onto my feet. I can breath once more. No longer do i find myself drowning in pain. We became close maybe a little to close. I wanted to kiss you but something stoped me. I don't quite know what it was but i'm glad it did. When you hold me i get so confused as to what you want from me. Our hugs are more then friends but not quite anything else. You told me to go for that guy. Does that mean you don't want me or does it mean you can't have me. I don't want him. I want you. He wouldn't want me anyway there's too much baggage there. i don't have to explain it to you like i would him. You know all i've been through all they've put me through. Don't leave me... [This message has been edited by katherine (edited 03-31-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
oh god kattie...i guess we all know how you feel..  ...its so confusing when you're in that postion..not to mention a bit frustrating..but overall a good poem..  i liked it a lot |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Oh god, I never know someone could know what I feel without knowing me, but you manage to have done that. Your words drove daggers into my heart, my soul, my being. They were so true I thought your words were a mirror. This poem is so powerful in its intensity, so real. I have been there, god have I been there. And it's hard to figure out, especially when the one person you think knows everything, can't know that. Can't know how you feel. And even if they do scrape the surface, all of a sudden you want them out of your world. They're getting too close. And then, as soon as they pull away, you want them back. Only now it's too late. Is it too late? hey, if you want to talk, feel free to e-mail me, it's always good to talk to someone who knows what I feel. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great poem. I know what you're talking about here. I think most people you will talk to has been put in a situation like this. It's not an easy one. Good luck.. Great poem, though. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
this was good, the situation a little confusing. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
This poem isn't based on one person it comes from a couple of different things i'm been through this year and the second half of last. Something just happened lately that has set off my writing, this one just came to me. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well Katie, looks like you took my advice, and big surprise, I'm a genius.  It is a lot easier to read now, flows marvelously and you deserve a pulizer. Okay maybe not that good... but it is good.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-31-2001).] |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a really good poem and I would not have changed anything about it but then again Allen is a great poet and he prolly knows better than I do. -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
whoa. Seriously a great poem with some 'happy' tones to it but seemingly laced with sadness. The perfect kind. Or maybe thats just my perception...either way it was a great poem. Keep posting >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
awwwwwwww...this was so touching. Good luck, I hope all works out for you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Seems like you've been going thru a lot of things lately. Why don't you just go out and tell him how you feel? I know it's hard, but we have to work for all the good things we want in life. Keep us informed "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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