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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-03-30 06:51 PM

Visions about holding you, dreams about loving you,
But that ain’t never gonna happen
Cause I’m just a regular human,
And you’re a super model, actress, beauty queen
on the cover of the TV guide.
If I could I’d open my heart to you
But I’m way to shy,
And if I meet you the words would come out so wrong
All my life I’ve been wanting to sing you a song
about how I, straight from the heart.

Every time I see a picture of you
I look into your eyes, they’re like to shinning stars
Rising from the horizon.
I only wish they where the real thing.
Cause then they would be the most beautiful
Diamond rings.

Just knowing your in this world and I can’t reach to you
Makes me lose control, my senses, don’t know what to do
The pictures of you in my mind, is what keeps me alive
Without you in this world, I just wouldn’t be living at all

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-31 05:24 AM

A very unique portrayal of love here. I liked the thing about eyes being diamond rings.

that was very neat.
Nice job.
~Allan

Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale)

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-03-31 11:47 AM

celeberity love? i thought it was a funky, intersting read.

regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-03-31 12:34 PM

I don't know what it was about this one, but I didn't like it as much as I do some of your other work. Maybe you could try breaking up the lines more to make the flow better.
THanks for sharing.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-01 06:21 PM

I liked it. I thought this was a well written poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-09 04:54 PM

So, who's the celebrity?

good post
keep sharing
and dont forget to answer my question

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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