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Pimpin Poet
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since 2000-08-28

Posts 5

0 posted 2001-03-30 06:05 PM

THOSE WHO TRY WILL SUCCEED,
THEY'RE ALL WORRIED ABOUT THEY'RE FUTURE INDEED.
GOING TO COLLEGE AND LEARNING MORE,
GET OUT IN THE REAL WORLD AND EXPLORE.
YOU MAY GET TIRED AND YOU MAY WANT TO QUIT,
BUT DON'T BE CHILDISH AND THROW A FIT.
GO TO SCHOOL AND DON'T COMPLAIN,
CAUSE ONE DAY YOU MIGHT FLY A PLANE.
OR BE AN ENGINEER AND MAKE SOME MONEY,
THEN YOU'LL LOOK BACK AND SAY THAT'S FUNNY.....
HOW I DIDN'T CARE OR WANT TO LEARN,
BUT LOOK AT ALL THESE THINGS I EARNED.
I MADE IT NOW BUT IT'S STILL NOT OVER,
I STILL HAVE BILLS BACKED UP TO OCTOBER.
I'LL KEEP MY HEAD HIGH AND LOOK UP AND SAY,
GOD I DIDN'T KNOW IT WOULD BE THIS WAY.
MY CHILDHOOD IS OVER, MY FAMILY DEPARTED,
THIS ISN'T THE END BECAUSE MY LIFE JUST STARTED.

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2001-03-30 06:10 PM

i liked it. it was a good poem. hope to see mroe

regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-31 05:17 AM

Caps... really bother me. Maybe do without the all-caps in your next post.

I sort of lost the whole meaning because that was bothering me so much. But I did catch that the ending was nice... so I'll say that.
The ending was nice.
No more caps!
~Allan

Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale)

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-03-31 01:00 PM

I'll agree with Allan. The caps-lock thing makes people lose interest, and it changes the whole tone of your poem. Do without that next time, and you might get a few more replies.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-01 06:33 PM

Nicely done here!
However I see that this is posted twice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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