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0 posted 2001-03-28 09:09 PM



You Dont Understand

I dont understand it,
What is wrong with u?
You list 101 reasons,
Well i cant even think of two.

You seem to think your nothing,
More worthless then a grain of sand.
You can tell me this all you like,
But i just dont understand.

What i see in you,
Is far more then meets the eye.
I see the person i love,
live for and despise.

Such feelings in my heart,
Only you can make grow.
Only such anger and sadness,
Could u make seep through,
My daily mask and let show.

So you think your a nobody,
But i guess you'll never see it too.
Now your the one who doesnt understand,
You dont understand what its like,
To be me looking at you.



© Copyright 2001 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-28 09:11 PM


that is going in my libary! i think we all feel worthless sometimes and we dont realize that we arent, because we arent looking from the outside. amazing!
Regina

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2 posted 2001-03-28 09:17 PM


Whoa... that is so beautiful!  Now this one hit me hard.  I know what you're talking about.  This one's another library piece.  VERY nicely done!  *claps*

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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3 posted 2001-03-28 09:56 PM


oooh that famous quote..you dont know what its like to be me looking at you. i love that..i have it on my walla   Along with 500 of my other favorite ones. i ALWAYS get inspiration to write poems from quotes~its awesome lol brain fart and i cant write..go look through quotes to get an idea   Great one here...talk to you later tho~ <3 ya chick

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¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

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4 posted 2001-03-29 12:23 PM


This is important to be able to observe... I, myself, know a lot of people who only take what they think of themselves into account, when there are others who care a great deal about them and think very highly of them.
Well done!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind.  For I can only see out of my own.  ~~Carly Van Dort


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5 posted 2001-03-29 03:36 AM


beautiful poem! i liked it....
keep writin and i'll be waitin 4 more posts

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6 posted 2001-03-29 08:02 AM


Your format started to get very strange towards the end of the piece however the meaning behind it was well displayed. For me, the two ending stanza's didn't flow too well.

Good Luck with the situation.

~AF~

Death is delightful. Death is dawn, the waking from a weary night of fevers unto truth and light.
~ Joaquin Miller ~

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7 posted 2001-03-29 02:41 PM


This poem was excellent with a very powerful ending.  i look forward to reading more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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8 posted 2001-04-01 12:40 PM


I felt you did well on this one. Not your best, but still a good read.

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9 posted 2001-04-01 09:15 PM


I think this wasnt one of my best but i needed to get my feelings out and thats the only thing that resulted from it and it was good enough for me. Thanks everyone for reading!!
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10 posted 2001-04-09 04:50 PM


One things people should remember is all that matters is as long as they're everything to the person that loves them and vice versa.  try telling him that  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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