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lilpoet
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0 posted 2001-03-28 06:40 PM



Look all around you
Look at all the pain
This is what it's like
Being in a gang

You're hurting yourself and others
And you need to leave that place
There's only one problem
The gun is staring you in the face

It's a dagger in our relationship
Can you feel the pain?
Probably not-You're too busy
Shooting drugs through your vain

I worry about you day and night
Wondering if there's still a you and I
Wondering if you'll make it
Wondering if you'll die...

You made the choice
Made it all on your own
I hope you're happy
Living life alone

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

© Copyright 2001 Nicole Chandler - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2001-03-28 06:52 PM


wow!ummm....that was very realistic.....im keeping my comments to myself.....but the poem was great
its a reminder to me
goes into my libary

regina

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2 posted 2001-03-28 08:27 PM


Wow... this one hit hard.  I know someone who's in a gang, and it kills me to see him go through that.  It kills me even more to know I can't help him.  
Anyway, thanks for sharing.  Good job.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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3 posted 2001-03-28 11:43 PM


Very profound piece here, a realistic topic that doesn't get enough recognition.  
Kudos on an original theme for a poem.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind.  For I can only see out of my own.  ~~Carly Van Dort


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4 posted 2001-04-01 12:29 PM


Nicely done here. You've discussed a topic we usually do not see around in the forums.
Very good poem....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Erin
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5 posted 2001-04-01 03:04 PM


I wrote a poem about my friend who was in a gang about a year ago. He died cause he thought being in a gang was something that made life worth living. He was shot 6 times. Whoever this person is must mean something to you or else you wouldnt have wrote it. Why not give the person this poem and let them know how you are feeling. I just reposted my poem. Read it please, its called Still Shining Brightly.

People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts.

[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 04-01-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-04-06 11:27 PM


If you really do care about this person, I suggest you do all you can to get him out of his situation.  It'll be hard, but still try.  Hope one day he does see the light  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

AngelShell
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7 posted 2001-04-07 03:30 AM


Wow, this is really deep.  Deep and different...I hope that it was a fictional experience for your sake.
I had a friend who used to shoot himself up every night, it wasn't a pretty sight and in the end there was nothing we could do but leave him alone.  I tell you, it was the hardest thing I've ever had to do, just walk away.  I don't even know what happened to him, does that make me a terrible person?  Probably.

I really liked this poem.  Hit close to home.

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8 posted 2001-04-07 12:28 PM


Hey,

      This is a great poem. I liked it alot. Everything I would have said so I am going to shut up   Until your next poem

          -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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