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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
Hi everyone please I need some help I wrote this poem and I really like it but all titles I give it are too literal, and i want something more simbolic, so I'm trying to see if anyone can help me with ideas for a title for this poem. I hope you all enjoy. We hide ourselves between our thoughts. Deny any aceptance of a world not known. We look so blindly, we don't look at all. My closed reality, so hard to understand. I know not my existance, help me if you can. Answers you might state, more questions you might rise. Do not take your existance so open, so carefree, the end comes to all; an answer I'll never get.  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one. I can't help on the title though. Most of my titles are usually literal.Titles are one of the things I have trouble with. Sorry I couldn't help, but the poem was a good read. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done Jorge, I liked this one a lot. Finally I could access this one! Somehow I couldn't get in before, but keoni replied and it worked after that. Anyway.......no idea for a title cuz if it were good I'd steal it for myself.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
Alright thanx you guys well I hope someone else comes in and can tell me some ideas cause I'm in blank, thanx for reading. I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
but its a good poem but i bet u think a little more anda title will come up coz its ur poem so ur own title will be best even though it might be literal... keep writin  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Just take one of the most signifigant parts of the poem and use it as the title, that's what I do. If I were to sit back and look at this after writing it, I'd call it "Closed Reality" or "My Closed Reality," depending on whether or not I wanted the personal touch to it. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
Well thank for the support . I think I'll call it "Dark Questioning" or something of such sort. Anyways thanx for all I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Love the poem was thinking of "Unknown Truth" for a title but you got one already not that my suggestion is a good one anyways  keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nice job! I liked this a lot.. Keep posting --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is a really good poem, a very nice read. good job and keep posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
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