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Crash&Burn
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0 posted 03-26-2001 03:39 PM       View Profile for Crash&Burn   Email Crash&Burn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Crash&Burn

Hi everyone please I need some help I wrote this poem and I really like it but all titles I give it are too literal, and i want something more simbolic, so I'm trying to see if anyone can help me with ideas for a title for this poem. I hope you all enjoy.

We hide ourselves
between our thoughts.
Deny any aceptance
of a world not known.
We look so blindly,
we don't look at all.
My closed reality,
so hard to understand.
I know not my existance,
help me if you can.
Answers you might state,
more questions you might rise.
Do not take your existance
so open, so carefree,
the end comes to all;
an answer I'll never get.



I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

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keoni
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1 posted 03-27-2001 04:52 PM       View Profile for keoni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for keoni

I liked this one. I can't help on the title though. Most of my titles are usually literal.Titles are one of the things I have trouble with. Sorry I couldn't help, but the poem was a good read.
Jon

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2 posted 03-27-2001 04:55 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Nicely done Jorge, I liked this one a lot. Finally I could access this one! Somehow I couldn't get in before, but keoni replied and it worked after that.
Anyway.......no idea for a title cuz if it were good I'd steal it for myself.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Crash&Burn
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3 posted 03-27-2001 06:26 PM       View Profile for Crash&Burn   Email Crash&Burn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Crash&Burn

Alright thanx you guys well I hope someone else comes in and can tell me some ideas cause I'm in blank, thanx for reading.


I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

anonymous albert ?
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4 posted 03-28-2001 03:37 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

but its a good poem but i bet u think a little more anda title will come up coz its ur poem so ur own title will be best even though it might be literal...
keep writin
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5 posted 03-28-2001 04:04 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Just take one of the most signifigant parts of the poem and use it as the title, that's what I do.
If I were to sit back and look at this after writing it, I'd call it "Closed Reality" or "My Closed Reality," depending on whether or not I wanted the personal touch to it.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind.  For I can only see out of my own.  ~~Carly Van Dort

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6 posted 03-28-2001 06:24 PM       View Profile for Crash&Burn   Email Crash&Burn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Crash&Burn

Well thank for the support  . I think I'll call it "Dark Questioning" or something of such sort. Anyways thanx for all

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

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Love the poem
was thinking of "Unknown Truth" for a title
but you got one already
not that my suggestion is a good one anyways  
keep sharing

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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8 posted 04-06-2001 10:32 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Nice job!
I liked this a lot..
Keep posting

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

banburycross
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9 posted 04-06-2001 11:41 AM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

This is a really good poem, a very nice read.  good job and keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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