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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-03-26 01:46 PM

I know you didn't mean,
what you said,
the last time we talked.
You didn't mean to say,
what you said to me,
the last time we talked.
you didn't (and still don't)
know how that hurts,
what you said to me the last time we talked..
You didn't mean to hurt me,
to hurt my feelings,
the last time we talked.
But you did and I didn't tell you,
so that might as we be,
the last time we ever talk.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

Life is what happens when you're making ot

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-03-26 06:23 PM

I don't like this one as much as I do some of the other poems you've written. The first few lines are very repititious, and it seems to repeat the same things throughout the poem. Maybe something to change... Thanks for sharing, though.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-26 06:30 PM

This was sad. Maybe things can be worked out allysa. I don't know but the poem was pretty to the point in just expressing yourself and venting.
Hope all gets well soon!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2001-03-27 08:16 AM

thanks Dopey. I know my poem sucks, atleast I think so, but I needed to get this out

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't.

Life is what happens when you're making ot

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-03-27 12:53 PM

Yeah, cheer up Allysa.

I'll agree the poem was not the best I've ever read.  Pretty plain.
But still, be happy.  There are those of us who love you in PIP, and will be here for you always.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

5 posted 2001-03-27 02:25 PM

I didnt think your poem sucked at all and in fact I know exactly what you mean..you want to say more..but there just isnt anymore to say. Sometimes things are better off left unsaid and sometimes its just time to move on to better things. Thanks for sharing!
~Nikki~

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-04-04 06:50 PM

Poem seems to be exactly what you felt after things happened. Not bad at all
What's going on Allysa?

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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