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A life too young to be lost (plz read?)
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A life too young to be lost (plz read?) |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia 
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Hi, this poem is not my usual lovey mushy stuff. Yesterday one of my boyfriends good friends died in a car accident. I knew him too becoz i sat with him at lunch last year until the year 12's graduated. I know this poem isn't very good, but it just came to me to write about it... thanks A tragic crash I heard on the news A life too young to be lost And I glanced up for a look I recognised that mangled car When I heard, I knew exactly who it was The guy whose life had been lost I remembered those days out on the grass Sitting with my boyf & all those yr 12 guys And Tim was there too He was so quiet, never said a word Just sat with his roll, smiling My boyfriend had nothing but total respect For this guy who was apparently a legend It happened at 4am, on the country road We don’t know yet whether it was speed or alcohol Some say he fell asleep at the wheel Of his blue holden commodore My friend told my boy, when I was there And went into this horrible shock He was such a legend we said to himself Why did this have to happen He told me later he was his mate for 10yrs Saw him all the time I didn’t what to do so I held him so close As into my shoulder he cried At school today I remember what it was like When the yr 12’s were still there But they graduated last year, all out into the world While I’m still doing year 11 I saw Tim on the bench eating his roll And the others mucking around and joking Back then life was so care-free I wish his life had been spared Why did this have to happen? He was so young, just 18 And he wasn’t saved Now he’s not in even heaven A fatal crash , killing 3 teens Why does this sort of thing happen Was it drugs or alcohol, or just driving tired? What a waste of 3 lives… 3 souls Death seems so very far away Until it happens to someone you know So many questions, so much anger and despair But for my boy, I’m always there… * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
This is really upsetting, I've never lost a friend, but since the last week in December, there have been 3 deaths in my family. its awful, I hope you and your boy do better, and my thoughts are with you ~Tamma i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
My condolences. You said the 3 souls were a waste but I really don't see it that way. They are somewhere right now just hanging out....whether it be in heaven or in our memories, they are still alive for now and for always.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Oh wow, this is sad. It was very good, and has a nice style, but this is sad. I've never lost someone like that, but I don't think I ever would. I'm sorry that you have to go through that. Great poem. Also, just a little word of advice, because your poem's title has on it "Plz read," a lot of people may choose not to read this. Next time, you might get a lot more replies without the plz read. Good job just the same. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-26-2001).] |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
thanks for replying, my boyfriend has really been affected by this happening, if anyone has any advice what i could do to help him out, it would be so appreciated! thanks! Luv Jo xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I really liked this one, and my sympathy goes out to you. Hang in there. And like you said at the end, Be there for your boy. Time will lighten the load, but for now just try to help him along. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Sorry to see you have to go thru the loss of a good friend. Life seems to be really unfair. Just remember, he's up there happy right now  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a sad situation. Death comes to us all, and he knows no age or situation. The best thing to do is to keep them alive in your memories. This is a wonderful tribute to them. As for your boyfriend, the best thing you can do is be there for him. Best wishes.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a sad poem enough said :'( such young people dead.... -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
Hey that was great. i know what it is like to lose a friend. i lost my best frined you get so confused with life. wondering why them. it sucks but remeber there life was never wasted. the lived for a reason. it won't make sense now but in the end it will. "Life is a joke. It doesn't make sense 'til the end." lot of love, dana |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is such a tragic thing to have happen. I don't know what you can do for your bf, but be there for him. Good job on the poem. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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