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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I love you, Lord knows I do. We sit together hands held, Admiring the view. I wrote this about my boyfriend of 8 months. We met the first week of college and are faced with the impending question what happens this summer. A question I'm willing to address but being who he is, he's not. I love you, Lord knows I do. We sit together hands held, Admiring the view. It's seems so funny to me, We can look out over the whole world, But we can't look at us. You know the old saying, "If it was meant to be it'll be?" Maybe that's not true, considering everything I don't see, In that case what the hell am I doing staying? Convienent we are, It takes nothing for us to say, "Things are great, let's not look past today." But today is soon over, And tomorrow fast approaching. We don't look at tomorrow, Because today is so easy. Tomorrow we're 200 miles away, Maybe I just shouldn't stay. I ask you are you willing to work for this? To which you have no response. You don't know what the future holds, But sometimes I don't know what today is. So maybe I shouldn't leave this in your hands, Maybe I should just make a stand. I love you but am so afraid, Maybe it's time to walk away. "I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life." |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
I understand what your trying to say. Remeber you are still young and many things can happen, you got the world ahead of you. Long distance relationships can become really hard. You display true emotions here and I enjoyed your poem. Keep posting.  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
What's so problematic about summer? You're in college and you'll be back together. I mean, is your relationship so insignificant in YOUR eyes that you can't cope with a measly 2 months without each other? I mean maybe it's not even 2 whole months at that. I'm not saying the concept is stupid, but if you LOVE each other you should talk about this and you should get down to the roots of your feelings. You obviously care about this guy a lot, and since that's the case I presume you'd like to continue the relationship. So what's the problem with SUMMER? I see none.......enlighten me please. ANyhow, I found the poem to be written just fine. Keep it up! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Great job on this. Beautiful poem. But remember that guys come and go. Again, very nice job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
My problem with summer is that it's almost 4 months long and I don't believe in doing relationships half way. Either you're in or you're out and if the case is that he's out then I want to know that versus trying to make a relationship work and being the only one willing to work. "I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I can understand what you are saying... good job on the poem. I did enjoy it.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Aww, that's so sad! But summer really isn't that long, and it goes by fast. Of course, when you're waiting for someone, it can be long. But be happy. Do whatever you have to do. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You know, I admire you for willing to at least ry to make it work. If he can't, i guess the best thing to do as you said is let go. Hope things get better for you. keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really like this piece. i think you worded it beautifully and expressed how you felt really well. i hope everything works out Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Once again......if you love each other it shouldn't be a problem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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