I wake alone and feel your arms around me, Or so it seems; a whisper of your voice lingers Like a wisp of smoke around my head. You are and aura of scent-- The spices of the east are in your peppered veins.
You are taut and lofty, wise as Chinese proverbs And you taste fresh green, like a forest after rain As tender and fragile as rice paper Deep and delicious. You hold every mystery of the Orient.
Ooh... I'm going to applaud this piece eagerly. The theme you used in it was BRILLIANT. Very original... and you did a great job. Excellent metaphors and similies, and you didn't even need a rhyme scheme. It's free verse like this that makes me jealous. Did you know you are the first person who's starting post has gone into my private library? Congratulations on this. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. I certainly do hope that you post quite frequently, and enjoy your time here. ~Allan
If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort
Child of the Stars
Ann Arbor, MI
Welcome welcome welcome. I'm already amazed...now I'm forced to patiently await your next post. I'm really bad at this patience thing, so don't make me go thru TOO much waitin, aiight? YAY! Eneh weh...ciao! ~Carly
"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV
I really like your alias......hehe Anyhow I thought you did quite well on this poem. Very different from what I'm used to reading here. Welcome to Passions and I hope you enjoy it here as much as we all do!
I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.
I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily
Welcome and nice job on your poem. It was a great read. I found your little note at the bottom interesting too """ (For you; you know who you might be) """ 'you know who you might be' hmmm, actually some very powerful words when I do what I usually do and dig way to deep. anyways nice one, Jason
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