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emptyness
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since 2000-03-09

Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

0 posted 2001-03-25 04:11 PM

Through seas of fire I swam
And mountains of broken glass I crawled
Through dragons caves, dark forests, and all evil places
I searched

Through all the legions and armies of those who would stop me
Surpassing everything they placed in my way
Killing every soldier who would keep me from my goal

And then after rounding the last ridge and after killing the last evil general and after climbing the tallest mountain I was able to do what I had gone through so much for
I could hold you as you cried

"Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist
"Post bellum auxilium"~where were you when i needed you

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-03-25 06:50 PM

This was exceptional! I was really impressed by the ending. Very nice!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-25 11:44 PM

Yeah, the ending was pretty heavy-hitting. Great job!
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-03-26 07:36 PM

This was a very well written poem! I liked this a lot... I love the end. Thanks for sharing.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

UnPumpkin
Junior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 18

4 posted 2001-03-26 10:45 PM

Mmmm...pie...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-06 10:34 AM

The last line sums it all
Great writing
I enjoyed the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-04-06 12:03 PM

I agree with everyone else, great poem with a powerful ending. Good writing, keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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