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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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0 posted 2001-03-25 03:56 PM

Kettle boiling up ready to explode.

This is my rage,
I’m boiling up with hate,
I’m trapped up in this cage,
I’ve got to much on my plate,
It’s mothers day tommorow,
But I have no mother to celebrate,
So I’m drowning out my sorrow,
But it leaves me feeling great,
I’m boiling like a kettle,
But my whistle has fallen off,
I’ve got scores I have to settle,
Steam I have to let off,
I’m angry at my mother,
For what she’s gone and done,
She’s been with another,
And i’m going to let off like a gun.

Anyway this is for my mother on mothers day, I hope she appreciates what kind of person she is.

" War is peace,
Freedom is Slavery,
Ignorance is strength" - George Orwell "1984"

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

1 posted 2001-03-25 04:09 PM

Ah, how sweet, i can see you really--hey! Wait! This isn't sweet!

Don't you wish you could, somehow write louder ?

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-25 06:33 PM

It sucks man......not the poem but the situation. Hope things get better.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-25 11:43 PM

Interesting scheme of rhyme in the poem. It interlocked, but one of them remained when the other shifted. It was quite unusual.
This caught my eye. The poem was alright, but could have been done better. Although I give you a great big kudos on the format.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-03-26 07:52 PM

This is great, as usual! I hope things get better for you.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-04-04 07:09 PM

What can I say...I'm shocked
I don't blame you for your anger
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

6 posted 2001-04-04 07:13 PM

I liked your poem because I can feel your hatred while reading it.

"It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all" ~Unknown

Empty tears
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since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

7 posted 2001-04-05 10:49 PM

I guess u feel the same way on mothers day as i do on fathers day. Great post,good luck not exploding, but if u do u have a perfectly legitimate excuse.
~Brittany~

fractal007
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

8 posted 2001-04-05 10:58 PM

Marshalzu:

I liked this one a lot. It reminds me a bit of the way someone I used to know wrote notes to people. I'm glad I'm not the only one here who feels a bit of distress over family matters.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

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