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Elizabeth
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0 posted 2001-03-25 01:49 PM


Happy now, Lakewalker? This is actually a repost, but since I don't have anything new written, I chose this one to post here.

Sometimes when you love someone it hurts you real bad
Along with friendship come the good times and also come the sad
There are things that have to happen that affect you and your friend
And there's nothing you can do about it except wait for the end.
You wish that you could just reach out and take away the pain
But from all the grief and sorrow there is something you can gain.
Remember that the book of life never states things will be fair
And sometimes all that you can do is show your friend you care.
These situations teach you the real meaning of strife
And the lessons you will learn from them will last you all your life.


© Copyright 2001 Elizabeth A. Larson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-25 01:52 PM


Good to see you posting in here, Elizabeth! Anyway, this is a pretty good piece. I can't say it's your best, but I like it. The things you say are very true, and you give some great advice. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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2 posted 2001-03-25 02:10 PM


This has a good message. I like this a lot! Good job...

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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3 posted 2001-03-25 06:42 PM


Great job on this one. A lot of truth within it!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-03-25 08:41 PM


great read, it is so true!

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

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5 posted 2001-03-25 11:49 PM


Ah, quite inspirational. I think a lot of young people could gain a lot by reading this.
Good job, Elizabeth. Thank you for gracing us with your presence.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-25-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-03-26 12:42 PM


Erica, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this. It's one of my older pieces, written about two years ago, and it was inspired by one of my friends (who still hasn't seen it, lol). Anyway, thanks!

Marie, thank you very much!

Javier, glad you liked!

Pixie-Babe, you're right, it is very true! Many thanks!

Allan, well aren't you sweet. Glad to be here reading in Teen. Thank you!


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7 posted 2001-03-26 05:50 PM


Well it's just so nice to see you here, I don't even know how to respond to this poem. *smacks himself* Sorry, uh, nice job on the poem, it's so true, so true.

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
"Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it."
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8 posted 2001-04-04 06:32 PM


Wham!!!
Very true Lizzy, very true
This is a great piece
Nice too see you sharing in the forum
Next time, make it a new one  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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9 posted 2001-04-04 06:37 PM


Hey,

    good job keep it up very good message

       -- Linc

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10 posted 2001-04-04 10:58 PM


Lakewalker thanks....didn't see your reply until now! Glad you liekd it.

Acire...I'll think about that. Hehe, thanks.

Linc...thank you!

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