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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 2001-03-25 10:26 AM


This sucks, but I'm bored, tired, and insane, so I DON'T care!! I owe more than this to my boyfriend, but, at the moment, it is the best I can do, I hope he understands.

You Say
Rains falls outside my window
Candle light flickers across the wall
I stare at the computer screen
Then look down and your diamond ring
You say you love me
And I believe you
Things change
You’re a little older
I don’t know where you’ll be next fall
People still talk
To you that doesn’t mean anything
You say you trust me
And I believe you
Leaves drip outside my window
Candle light cascades across the wall
I glance into the mirror
Then look down upon your picture
You say you want me
And I believe you
Time passes
I’m a little younger
You know where I’ll be next fall
I still cry
To you that means something
You say you need me
And I believe you

© Copyright 2001 Isabel Galaxia - All Rights Reserved
Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2001-03-25 10:45 AM


Aww... this was really good and I'm sure your boyfriend...(errr, fiance??) will be very happy you wrote it for him. Nice job, and good luck!!

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-03-25 10:48 AM


Very nice, Bel. I could very easily connect with practically every line in this piece. All except the diamond ring. Damnit, I want a diamond ring!

He should be very happy with this little display of your affection for him.

Nice job.

~AF~

In my end is my beginning.
~ Mary Stuart ~

ethel lahootie
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3 posted 2001-03-25 11:24 AM


awwwwww!!! this might not amount to everything he's written for you but i must say...this was a very very very good start!!! i loved it kT! its soooo...i dunno the word for it! will he be a senior next year??? well that was very very good...i enjoyed it! ~jO~
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4 posted 2001-03-25 01:22 PM


This is a wonderful piece to your boyfriend. Things can be tough when there are differences such as age between two people, but I'm glad that you two seem to be able to overcome. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Fading Away
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5 posted 2001-03-25 01:33 PM


This is beautiful. And it's no where close to sucking. Show this to your boyfriend. Very nice job.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

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6 posted 2001-03-25 06:15 PM


Nice to see the two of you doing ok!
Hope to see your relationship strong as ever for a long time.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

CLBinLOVE
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7 posted 2001-03-25 07:41 PM


i love you, and i love this poem too, thanks baby
thank you

let the fighting words lie
let the candle light die
let the sun come up
let the same imply
~EvE 6


Dark Omega
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8 posted 2001-03-25 07:52 PM


Um, it was good.
Isabel Galaxia
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9 posted 2001-03-25 08:00 PM


Jenn- Thank you much, and yes, he's my boyfriend
AF- Haha thanks! I've always wanted a diamond, still amazed I got one. And a necklace to match
Ethel- LOL thanks, yeah I'll have to work on it.
LoveBug- hehe I hope so
Fading- Thank you much
Dopey- Gracias muchacho.
Craig- I know, I love you too.
"Dark Omega"- C'mon now Ben. ..DARLING....
Thank you all for replying, I'm shocked to see this many!

Bel

Pixie-Babe03
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10 posted 2001-03-25 08:30 PM


this is really pretty, nice imagery! i wish i could write something liek this for my boyfriend!

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Dark Omega
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11 posted 2001-03-25 09:10 PM


*winces at the evil bat smiley-face* Um.. ok.. it was uh.. really, really, really good. The best thing I've ever read, Katie dearest.. put the evil bat down now..

*squeeky voice* Help!

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12 posted 2001-03-31 04:07 PM


this is really sweet.
it's also nice to see that you think he deserves better
how much better can it get?
thanks for the read
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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