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Another Face in the Crowd

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Fading Away
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0 posted 03-24-2001 12:44 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Fading Away

She hides it with her smile,
With her athleticism,
And with her good grades.
The world would not believe it,
Even if she confessed.
"Not you,"
They would say,
"You're too smart,
And too strong to do that."
But she does do it,
And its grip on her is tightening.
It's taken control of her,
And made her its puppet,
Powerless in defense,
And unable to resist.
She appears healthy,
Yet her insides are slowly rotting away.
The foul smell lingers on her hand
While the splash marks on her pants
Threatens the survival of the secret.
And she is not alone,
There are many others.
They unknowingly share
In a secret club
Where they seem to be the only members.
She surveys the crowd,
Wondering who else shares her secret,
But they don't stand out.
She, along with them,
Is just another face in the crowd.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Floyd - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-24-2001 01:19 PM       View Profile for Elvenblood   Email Elvenblood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elvenblood

Wow....this one, jsut like the other, very dramatic, and def going into my library. If these are you, I have to say, talk to someone, don't do anything selfdestructive, people will listen.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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2 posted 03-24-2001 01:56 PM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

Once again... an outstanding job. Free verse this good makes me jealous.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

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3 posted 03-24-2001 10:28 PM       View Profile for AngelShell   Email AngelShell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelShell

I really liked this, don't know if I quite understand it but it was good none the less.

Keep it up.
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4 posted 03-25-2001 03:04 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Great job on this one Marie. YOU have such a great talent for writing. I hope all is well.......seriously, if you need to talk, e-amil me

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 04-01-2001 06:33 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

You're a good narrator with your poems.  Have you tried writing prose.  I think you should go check out the forum "Passions in Prose"  Thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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6 posted 04-08-2001 10:24 AM       View Profile for Linc   Email Linc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Linc

Hey,

   I agree with Aicre this is a great poem loved it and your poetry is superb

    -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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7 posted 04-09-2001 01:20 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

I agree with allan, free verse this good makes me jealous.  *sigh*  at least it gives me something to aspire to.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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8 posted 04-10-2001 10:00 AM       View Profile for Heavens Tears   Email Heavens Tears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Heavens Tears

I really want to thanks you for writing this poem.  I can honestly say I know what you are going thorough.  Email me please!

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

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9 posted 04-10-2001 10:03 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This was excellent it flowed very well and I must admit being a little more than jealous.
Good work.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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10 posted 12-11-2001 10:33 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Wow, Marie. The images I was getting just then were mind blowing. I'm sorry you had to go through all of this. It's tough. *hugs*

Keep writing your heart stopping pieces.

~AF~

"Always keep focus on your dreams because most often than not that's all you'll have." - Javier

 
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