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0 posted 2001-03-24 12:39 PM


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1 posted 2001-03-24 01:16 PM


Woah..., that's a cool poem....I love it...it's very dramatic, thanks for posting it.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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2 posted 2001-03-24 01:16 PM


Woah..., that's a cool poem....I love it...it's very dramatic, thanks for posting it.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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3 posted 2001-03-24 01:54 PM


Oh man...  
This is your best poem.  I'm sorry but...
it had an AMAZING impact on me.  The way you worded everything, your metaphors...
It is VERY creative and VERY expressive.
Marie, you are a constant thrill to read.  Never stop posting.  Never!    
There is a place for poetry like this... it's called Allan's private library.  
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind.  For I can only see out of my own.  ~~Carly Van Dort

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-24-2001).]

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4 posted 2001-03-24 06:01 PM


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5 posted 2001-03-25 12:11 PM


Wow, this definately redefines the limits and digs deeper. This hit very close to home, too close to home, maybe that it why I'm drawn within it, maybe that's why I'm scared to step out of it, either way, this poem will always lie in me, stirring when maybe, I don't want it to, and lying still when I do.

Burn brighter, aim for the stars.

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6 posted 2001-03-25 07:34 AM


Hey,

Wonderful poem, it was a GREAT read I loved it keep up the good work. Until your next masterpeice

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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7 posted 2001-03-25 10:56 AM


Wow. I agree with Allan... great poem here. Symbols/metaphors were good.

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



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8 posted 2001-03-25 01:01 PM


...YEAH! This was really great... wow...yeah...really, really great...man oh man....
~Carly

"The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake."
- Leonardo da Vinci

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9 posted 2001-03-25 03:43 PM


You'll never be alone as long as you're here marie.
Great poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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10 posted 2001-04-01 06:49 PM


Seems like everybody has already told you on how good this poem is  
I love it
let's just put it that way  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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