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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
I sometimes think of you holding me then I get a sharp pain in my heart not a pain, but a love pain I'll just think of you even more I wish I could tell you "I love you" but to far away only a phone call away you told me if you jump off a bride you'd be the holding me from jumping I just wish you could hold me forever but there's no forever in the world I can't get you out of my mind I never want to say "bye" I talk about you all the time you bring a smile on my face when your name is said or when I think of you sometimes you bring happy tears and sad tears happy tears when you say the sweetest things sad tears when you and I are apart you made me a different person you brought out the "good" parts out of me I just want to be together but we can't that is what makes me sad I really love you, Love always,  Min |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Awww, how sweet and sad! I love this, it deserves a title, but I'm no guru. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww... sweet! I can't think of a title, but I like this poem a lot. It shows a lot of emotion... You're lucky to have someone like that. Nicely done. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
he's one of kind that's for sure. Min |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I can't think of a title either... sorry  Great job still. He sounds like a great guy.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
g [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 03-25-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here minna. Great love poem! You express yourself well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hang in there Minna. Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I'm afraid that i can't help you out much as far as a title goes either, but i thought this was a very sweet poem. wonderful job and keep posting! Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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