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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
Who are you? They say thet youre my father,but youre not the man I called daddy when i was three Who are you? Are you the man that kissed me goodnight or the man who abandoned me? Who are you? Are you someone who will help me or who will further screw up my life Who are you? Are you coming back to bring love or more pain,more strife? Who are you? Do I know you? I dont believe weve met,Dad. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
wow, this is a really powerful piece with a very powerful ending. i liked this poem a lot, and i look forward to reading more. keep writing and posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I agree, it's veyr powerful, and conveys many emotions. I love the repetition, hope you find happiness. No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This is sad.....real sad. I'm sorry this has happened to you. The poem was expressed wonderfully and I hope all goes well for you in the future with him.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Empty tears Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 64 |
thanx 4 the compliments,but do yall have any suggestions? I really want to polish this 1 because its one of my personal favorites. thanx 4 your help, Brittany |
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